Does your skin remember, Croetine?
the warm city air, the cloying dust,
the weight of devotion, supplication,
of men who worshipped at your feet.
Perhaps you yearned for a purer love
without the oily film of lust.
He made you wait, beg, plea, pray,
relinquish your hair, your desires, your name,
but when did you ever believe Croetine,
he had the power to refuse you?.
And at night Croetine, do you pose for Him?
when He summons up the moon,
in your dim lit cell, does your body pray,
free of robe and cowl and veil.
Would you pose for me Croetine, one last time?
for I remember the summer heat,
When a goddess stood in the city dirt,
A hundred lovers at her feet.
Comments
Highhat | November 17, 2010 - 14:56
I think this is brilliant shoe
;)Pia
Anna Marie | November 17, 2010 - 15:38
I love the last stanza. Simply magic.
shoe | November 17, 2010 - 16:02
Pia, my thanks for reading, pleased you like it.:}
Thank you Anna, much appreciated.
MistakenMagic | November 17, 2010 - 18:25
Gritty but oh-so-beautiful, Shirley! Love that last stanza. Brilliant take on the IP :)
Magic xxx
insertponceyfre... | November 17, 2010 - 18:34
this is lovely shirley
Cavalcaderl | November 17, 2010 - 19:24
new shoe
well done on well deserved cherry!IP
What a perfect poetic poem, I agree with Highhat
I was just going to put the same, excellent.
julie xx
shoe | November 17, 2010 - 19:29
oh wow, thanks Magic, Insert and Julie, I really wasn't sure about this one, so really glad you liked it. and thanks for the cherry, that has made my day,
fatboy74 | November 18, 2010 - 01:03
Stunning (again!) love the address in each stanza and one of the best IP inspired I have read. Really well done Shoe. :-)
seashore | November 18, 2010 - 09:51
Simply beautiful.
shoe | November 18, 2010 - 10:20
Gosh fatboy, what an amazing comment, I'm so grateful.
Seashore, I thank you for reading and liking it.
Silver Spun Sand | November 19, 2010 - 11:35
Just brilliant, shoe. A wonderful take on the IP.
Tina
shoe | November 19, 2010 - 16:56
Thanks for reading Tina, glad you like it.
tcook | November 19, 2010 - 18:13
Really excellent - a great response to a difficult IP.
SundaysChild | November 19, 2010 - 18:48
This is a delight to read; shivers up my spine.
shoe | November 20, 2010 - 14:43
Thank you Tony, it was a good exercise for me and I'm pleasantly surprised by how well it has been received, so thank you for the I.P.
Thanks SundaysChild, what a lovely comment.