Raindrops on the skylight,
pit-pat, staccato overhead
as light from a candle
sculpts her silhouette
out of the darkness.
Smoke from the factory
hangs low against
a blackberry sky, shredded
by a watercolour moon
and I defy the dawn
to break this reverie,
as her breath falls soft
upon my cheek
like a blue butterfly...
jasmine winds
jostling the trees
transport my mind
to thoughts of where
she and I might go to –
music of the spheres
serenading our dreams...
A fanfare of fountains,
arpeggios of waterfalls –
wavelets, feathering
some Caribbean beach
where we two lie – lost
in the gegenschein,
watching a timpani
of stars, doing
the old, soft-shoe.
Comments
skinner_jennifer | July 22, 2011 - 14:39
Hello Tina,
how do you come up with all these wonderful poems?
you really are a winner and you amaze me, how they
always come over fresh, no two poems are ever the
same.
I read this one, it sent shivers through me, I don't
know why, but it's incredibly moving to me.
Thankyou for the read.
Oh! and 'Happy Anniversary' to you and your husband!
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 15:21
Jenny - thanks;-) Both for reading and your lovely comment and for the good wishes for today. We have just come back from Waitrose and bought a nice bottle of wine to have with dinner tonight, when I shall pass on your greetings to him. It was really kind of you to remember.
Hope you have a nice evening too, and a good weekend;-)
Tina
RachelPatricia | July 22, 2011 - 18:40
Have to agree with all that Jenny has said - you have such a talent for sculpting the most beautiful imagery and sentiments, Tina, and this poem is yet another fine example of that :)
Hope you and your husband have a lovely weekend and many congratulations on your anniversary - he's a very lucky man, and I'm sure he knows it ;)
Another stunning read, thank you :)
Rachel xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 18:59
Rachel - your words have truly made my evening. Pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you, so very much, and especially for the anniversary congrats. We are just about to open that special bottle of wine and have dinner, and I shall pass on your good wishes. More than appreciated;-)
Tina xx
maggyvaneijk | July 22, 2011 - 21:14
What a romantic piece to make a reader swoon! Again you've unleashed a wealth of unforgettable images: blackberry sky and her breath falls soft / upon my cheek / like a blue butterfly and so much more...*sigh* Enjoy your anniversary!
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 21:24
Thanks, maggy. Pleased you liked;-)
Tina
insertponceyfre... | July 22, 2011 - 21:29
I agree with the others - some wonderful images in this poem. Happy anniversary Tina - I hope you enjoyed your day
sid | July 22, 2011 - 22:28
this is so atmospheric, right from 'Raindrops on the skylight, pit-pat' I just felt as if I was there. You're a wordsmith alright!
Highhat | July 23, 2011 - 04:55
I love it when you get so close to the core of human relationships Tina- you are so clever and unabashed
(took that word out of thin air ???is it right??)-bold-made my cheeks go rosey- well done on yet another beautiful descriptive poem
Hope you had a wonderful anniversary- congrats and have a likewise wonderful weekend- hope the sun shines on you and your husband.
atb
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | July 23, 2011 - 08:15
Insert - how very kind of you;-) Thank you, and good wishes duly passed on to other half.
Pleased you enjoyed this ..and yes, we did have a lovely day, and still another glass of champers left;-) Not for long though.
Silver Spun Sand | July 23, 2011 - 08:16
Thanks, sid;-) Have a good weekend.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 23, 2011 - 08:18
Hi there, Pia...and 'unabashed' is most certainly right, so the 'thin air' paid off;-)
Thanks for your lovely words, and for the sentiment behind them.
Tina