Chinese White –
his canvas
as he defines,
translates,
explores
her every contour;
the concave curve
of her hips
the sweat
between her breasts
glistening
in the lamplight.
His tongue –
the brush,
as he dips it
in her every colour
of love
and takes great pains
to go outside
the lines...
Comments
Highhat | June 4, 2011 - 17:57
excellent Tina
especially these lines which I like the best
"and takes great pains
to go outside
the lines"
;)Pia
maisie | June 4, 2011 - 18:00
and i like the first stanza best. its a good poem overall :)
Silver Spun Sand | June 4, 2011 - 18:07
Many thanks, Pia;-) My favourite lines too;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | June 4, 2011 - 18:07
Thanks for reading, Maisie. Pleased you liked;-)
Tina
Nathan Bednarek | June 4, 2011 - 20:47
Very atmospheric for such a short piece ;-)
Much enjoyed. Well done.
Nathan x
Silver Spun Sand | June 4, 2011 - 20:57
Pleased you liked this one, Nathan and thanks for telling me.
Tina xx
ScoZen | June 5, 2011 - 11:31
Ahh dear Sand Lady.
Not in the style of Jackson Pollock I hope.
Silver Spun Sand | June 5, 2011 - 12:29
;-) Sand Lady
seashore | June 5, 2011 - 12:40
Superb...and love the ending
Silver Spun Sand | June 5, 2011 - 12:45
Many thanks for reading, Coral. Glad you liked it;-)
Tina
skinner_jennifer | June 5, 2011 - 13:46
what can I say? but simply beautiful Tina.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | June 5, 2011 - 14:02
Many thanks, Jenny;-)
Tina
Cavalcaderl | June 5, 2011 - 18:01
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Wow, Certainly begins explosive.
I can imagine you painting.
julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | June 5, 2011 - 18:04
Explosive is a good word, Julie. Pleased you enjoyed;-)
Tina xx
Dark Fox | June 5, 2011 - 19:44
Simply sensual and poetic, so very beautiful.
Silver Spun Sand | June 5, 2011 - 20:34
Many thanks, Dark Fox. Glad you thought so;-)
Tina
JoseHdz | June 6, 2011 - 07:54
it's all been said. absolutely adore this!
cheers,
Jose
Cavalcaderl | June 6, 2011 - 07:58
new Silver-Spun-Sand
So sorry I read bit of name,
like your's on here, after reading
one of your exceptional poems, put
two and two to-gether thinking you,not
so deleted it. Maybe next great poetry
see you there.But your poetry is explosive with words,well use it then. I am trying find the englsih words I remember bit song Euro "Non Non Let'a" by
Cigliola Cingquetti" just found in search" played great takes me back, as music so expensive buy
This my prayer my only prayer as the day breaks and all is still.etc. Beautiful.Pop star opera last night
did you see Joe..all fab Katherine Jenkins.
julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | June 6, 2011 - 09:22
Thanks, Jose;-) Have a good week.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | June 6, 2011 - 09:28
Glad you liked this, Julie...and yes, I remember that song which won the Eurovision Song Contest in the late fifties, early sixties. The Italian entry I think. And I also watched, last night, Pop Star to Opera Star, and saw Katherine Jenkins. She was fabulous, as also was the woman who used to be in Bucks Fizz, whose name escapes me for the moment;-)
Have a good week;-)
Tina xx
barryj1 | June 6, 2011 - 12:54
Absolutely dazzling! Your infinite restraint here is at the heart of (yet another) perfect poem.
Silver Spun Sand | June 6, 2011 - 13:00
Thanks, so very much, barry. Pleased you thought so, and took the time to tell me;-)
Tina
Cavalcaderl | June 6, 2011 - 15:29
new Silver-Spun-Sand
H! Tina,Thanks answer. Went into search came up,
by "Cigliola Cinquetti" and we have, what's it called
turn on switch play great,see her singing 1983 or 1966.But no lines in english. Strangely enough someone now done a story, think Spanish on AbcTales. Not got nerve to ask. yes, opera great Cheryl Baker and pop star Jo- Mc Elderry. Memory escapes me. Three or four and me going n/home to-morrow sing a long, not on my own do it.Unless asked.Mine just booked BGT coming B/ton centre, as said, only back seats £35 each that's alot, he is down there. Caused laugh here trying opera bit it. But can be easier than ordinary songs, do you think.
Have a good week and many thanks.The accident was chair lift. 28 48 hours, before anyone new awful.
Don't do so much regular house work now.If busy.
julie xx
Dynamaso | June 8, 2011 - 00:31
I hope he's using water-soluble paints, Tina :) I don't know how you consistently turn out such gems, but I'm glad you do.
Silver Spun Sand | June 8, 2011 - 08:05
Definitely water-soluble, Mark;-) Pleased you liked...now it's back to the drawing board.
Tina
MistakenMagic | June 9, 2011 - 18:45
Absolutely stunning, Tina. A brilliant set of metaphors - I've never dated a painter myself, but I bet it would be a lot of fun ;)
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | June 9, 2011 - 18:51
I bet it would too;-)
Tina xxx