So gently she lifts her
onto the commode.
Light as a feather;
“No meat on your bones,”
the young woman jokes.
Like ring-a-ring-o-roses,
the bed-sores sting
as she winces. Glimpses
a face in the window. ‘Just
a reflection,’ she reassures.
“Thank heavens for that!
And the fact it’s not Tuesday...
when the window cleaner
comes,” and for a second,
she senses a smile and hears
the dim and distant echo
of an old, infectious chuckle
not heard in months.
“Hold still!” she tells her.
“I wouldn’t want you
to fall. Please...don’t
make me laugh, Mum.
It hurts.”
Comments
Luly Whisper | November 5, 2010 - 20:14
Well done.
celticman | November 5, 2010 - 20:56
echo of childhood in old age here.
Silver Spun Sand | November 5, 2010 - 21:19
Luly - thank you;-)
Silver Spun Sand | November 5, 2010 - 21:20
Appreciate your reading - and yes, you couldn't be more right.
fatboy74 | November 5, 2010 - 21:49
You have a wonderful knack of vividly catching moments in time and taking us with you - well done Tina. :-)
Silver Spun Sand | November 5, 2010 - 21:57
I'm glad you enjoyed the ride, fatboy. Many thanks;-)
shoe | November 6, 2010 - 12:37
An intimate and somehow happy moment, listed under love and rightly so.
Silver Spun Sand | November 6, 2010 - 13:05
Shoe - how well you put it;-) Thank you.
MistakenMagic | November 7, 2010 - 12:05
Absolutely beautiful, Tina! You've captured a wonderfully tender moment with great care and pathos. Well done :)
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | November 7, 2010 - 12:19
Hi there, Magic. Hope your Sunday is going well;-)
My thanks to you for taking time out to read this and am really pleased you got something from it.
Tina xxx
Kahdai | November 10, 2010 - 21:04
something strange about it Tina? or it could be just a happy memory :) K
Silver Spun Sand | November 11, 2010 - 08:41
This one is full of mixed emotions, Kahdai, so I guess you are right;-)
Tina xx
Kahdai | November 11, 2010 - 15:38
yes it must be part sad now I read it again xx
kheldar | November 28, 2010 - 20:46
Tina,
I hope this doesn't come out wrong - with your writing you make us intensely aware of your pain, not in a "look at what I've gone through" way (as too many celeb's now seem to do for instance) but in a "this is how it is way". Yes your pain is evident, but so too is your humanity and your spirit.
Thank you for letting me walk a little bit, only a little bit, of your road.
David xxx
Silver Spun Sand | November 29, 2010 - 10:12
David - I couldn't think of better company. Thank you for your much appreciated companionship along the way.
Tina xxx