Beside a pond, stiller
than a dream, we set
our picnic basket down,
she and I.
Overhead...
like silver streamers,
drifting Nimbus
courts the limestone
of the crags.
A frowning horizon
heralds the sweep...
a distant susurrus
of wings, grows
ever closer; a flock
of geese fret
a sullen skyline.
Nothing more I want.
Only this – right now;
a duo of amorous swans
defining the quietude
of a jet-black pool.
Then, she suggests
we trample down
some tangled tufts
of Meadow Foxtail;
bruise a patch or two
of Fragrant Orchid...
A sudden squall;
a passing shower...
Those velvet thighs,
so wet...so cool;
from a chalice
coloured cream
I drink my fill –
sweet Chardonnay.
Comments
ScoZen | March 30, 2011 - 14:27
hello sand lady
Lovely this, so visual.
Written from your little hill I hope?
take care
Silver Spun Sand | March 30, 2011 - 14:45
But, of course;-)
Ta, ScoZen.
Sand Lady
Beeme | March 30, 2011 - 15:55
I agree, you paint such a vivid picture, very beautiful imagery :)
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | March 30, 2011 - 16:16
Many thanks, Beeme. Pleased you enjoyed;-)
Tina xx
lenchenelf | March 30, 2011 - 16:35
Full on sensory swoop here Tina, clever use of sound to build the sensual atb Lena ;) x
skinner_jennifer | March 30, 2011 - 16:37
Hi Tina,
how do you manage to come up with such amazingly,
beautiful words? this poem just blew me away from
start to finish.
Thankyou.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | March 30, 2011 - 16:46
'Sensory swoop'...like that Lena. Maybe you should have been a writer;-)
Many thanks.
Tina;-)x
Silver Spun Sand | March 30, 2011 - 16:50
Really pleased you liked, and thank you.
Oh, and the answer to you question, having a good Thesaurus helps no end, Jenny;-)
Tina
seashore | March 31, 2011 - 10:27
Definitely go with the `sensory swoop' - nice one Tina.
Silver Spun Sand | March 31, 2011 - 10:31
You like that too, so did I;-)
Pleased you enjoyed, Coral, and thanks so much for letting me know.
Tina
fatboy74 | April 1, 2011 - 21:13
Sensual is the word - beautifully done. :-)
Silver Spun Sand | April 2, 2011 - 07:57
Thought you might appreciate this one, fb. Pleased you did, and many thanks;-)
Tina
Highhat | April 3, 2011 - 19:27
You know exactly which words to pick Tina- this is very beautiful
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | April 3, 2011 - 20:09
Pia - so do you. And I thank you for them;-)
Tina
sue dinum | May 20, 2011 - 20:41
Tina, just wanted to say how beautiful this poem is... so delicate and sensitively written. When it comes to writing about love (and sex) you have such a light touch, yet one feels such impact too.
Fantastic, well done!
sue
Silver Spun Sand | May 20, 2011 - 20:50
Comments like this mean so much to me. Thanks so much;-) Hope you have a great weekend.
Tina