Cote d'Azur

'I watched you wade
until the sea passed
your waist – shrug off
the sun as it nudged
your shoulder'

- love these lines, Tina! This is a beautifully visual poem and I really like the combination of wisdom and absolute innocence ;)

Magic xxx

Thanks so much, Magic;-)

I am glad you found this poem 'visual', which was my aim and the mix of emotion between youth and maturity exactly what I had hoped to achieve.

Have a good week;-)

Tina xxx

I can thoroughly concur with Magic's comment. Those are my favourite lines too.

Luigi xxx

Just beautiful, I love the penultimate stanza and the bittersweet end. One thought, should it be past instead of passed, perhaps either would suffice.:}

Hi Tina, a beautiful but profoundly sad poem, I love the final line:

And I might
have done, except my arms
were full and where you led
I could not go.

I can't help but feel this line refers to more than the event in question.

David xxx

This is very beautiful Tina :) I really like the double meaning of the last verse too, like David I can't help feeling there is more there, than is written.

Beeme xx

Hi there, Shirley. Pleased you enjoyed.

As to 'past' and 'passed' that is one thing I am never sure of. Shall have a little think about it;-)

Tina

Again, Beeme, you too saw the meaning of this poem. It is dear to my heart, as what that day, sadly, so far away and in another world now.

Thank you for your perception;-)

Tina xx

Thank you so very much, Luigi. Great minds obviously think alike;-)

Tina xxx

How perceptive you are, David. Yes indeed it refers to my late daughter, and goes far beyond that particular event, as you guessed.

Pleased that, as always, you got to the heart of it;-)

Tina xxx

Hi Tina,

I cannot speak for others who read your work, but for my part I feel honoured that you are able to share such a personal and painful part of yourself with the ABCtales community and through that, as a member of that community, with me .

David xxx

David, thank you for that. Likewise, I feel honoured so to do.

It has only been by being fortunate enough to be able to share my feelings with others, like yourself who are kind enough to listen, that has given me the purpose to get on with this day to day thing we call living.

Tina xxx

Thanks for reading, Julie. Pleased you liked it;-)

Tina xx

Another touching peice; very well done; it does help ease the pain to write about it but its a lot harder to let others see it, i know. We open ourselves up when we show our writing to others. You are very brave to share this with us - thank you.
;)

Darkenwolf - I appreciate your comments greatly. They mean much.

Tina;-)

The truth is the easiest thing in the world to say - you are so very welcome.
:)

new Silver-spun-sand
Beautiful, powerful
poem, of love and devotion.
Yes, I felt the same way as
David after I read.
I knew what and who you mean't
your beloved daughter.
Very sad all these things happen
to people, in all walks of life!
Most mine based on therapy,
like MistakenMagic says.
and I can now, feel people's
pains, and empathy with all.
when you've been there?
to the only way foreward is
to understand, and listen
and help maybe other's.
But we can't always, name, or say
what we want. For safety reasons.
Quite often put my foot in it.
But if it help's someone I am pleased
I was part most of the machine, in.
Started from Kheldar David's story?
and few names of us, in so tried put
those in David mentioned.
Bit weepy eyes, over the poem
I tried lovely comments, coming in
"The Brush Off!
julie xx

So you've seen the wonderful magazine, have you Julie? Never mind my photo - how about the lovely Japanese lady on the front. It is quite splendid!!

Tina xx

new Tina,
somewhere I copied list of
AbcTales on here, thanking
them by names. From AbcTales.com Issue 21.
I can't seem find it.aS Ray was out. Typed them.
Maybe it's not allowed. Or forgot submit button.
Congratulations that will be I see further
to come from you, wish you luck.
Ray, said it must be your name for
Tina. Lovely poem, and beautiful photo
of you. Been strange day, yesterday and
to-day, shop's called Penandpaper and Blighter's
Rock, like here, paer now I Try song coming out.
The one Shimmy flopped. All names I used, post mag; gardening flower's Roses I think name you have one
is called "Cote de Azur" is that right. good luck.
julie xx

knowing your story is knowing you a bit too. I am so glad that you can ease off in this forum. I hope it helps somewhere?
Beautiful poem- so touching. Keep your spirits high Tina- ;)

new darkenwolf
No I can't.
Thankyou.
julie x

I guess all of us have a story to tell, pia, but I thank you for reading mine and for your empathy.

Tina;-)

new Silver-Spun-Sand
Absolutely lovely, who did it,
I didn't know it's a cherry! tree.
Like a dress like that. Peculiar to
I tried one Addicted to post by H.M.
The Queen, true, in 2009. made story
little girl at music, and teacher forewards
her talent on to H.M. The Queen, and how she
meets her. I read in issue AbcTales, by author
slightly different title, and similiar story, brill;
but just had another one, reply, as I send a card.
Amazed to get answer, Lady In Waiting. Not sure who
Editor was Editorial Oh! sorry, found looking Mark Mason (Dynamaso) Now see. Very good.
gone. bit of tears, in my eyes, after trying "The Brush Off". effected me. But months ago strange thing, post came someone never heard of to do with
Little Flower, and I send a little bit money, and
they thank to holy, to-day thought that make a lovely
title for a poem, 5 minutes later post, letter from
them, goes for water and writing etc; children, attached The Guardian Angel, key ring, and labels
little child wings, can I say name St.Teresa's fund,
never heard of, but years back remember cd. I have and found. The web; is on here. May have to delete this if it is advertising in the rules.
You look so poised and angelic in your photo gorgeous. Not ot good emails coming in sometimes on mine! and spams, so just delete. Day off to-day as
both shop, friend, tells me to get I write down Ray goes and said same to him, Ray shops, I have to balance all. Sometimes he forgets not easy.etc;
all the best
julie xxx

I love the sense of nostalgia this conjurs up, a sense of loss and of times past. Really beautiful and evocative.

Thank you so very much;-)

The feelings and emotions of which you speak, are exactly what I endeavoured to convey to the reader, so I am really pleased to know it did just this for you.

Hope you have a pleasant weekend.

Tina

lovely.

Thank you, Jose...Much appreciated.

Tina

Tina, I love the sea & cant help running into it clothes or not, as soon as ii can see it! yet am also afraid of other people on the beach, is it innocence? oh and what is the title?, made me think Ii wouldnt be able to read trhis poem! glad ii could though and am glad you can write about your daughter & share it with us, I think most of your poems about her are wonderfully joyous & nostalgic anyway, so its good thing! I dont understand the ending, yet I think it is sad, ii never like you to change such good writing, yet I prefer happy endings. K xxx

My god Tina I am struggling not to blub after reading that - absolutely fabulous, one of the best poems i have read on here. You capture the very essence of loss in this, all the more heartwrenching as it is never directly referred too - what a wonderful and brave piece to share, you are a star. :-)

Thank you so much for reading this, fatboy and for your empathetic words and kind thoughts.

Tina