Consensus being, last night, she’d scored.
Full of the joys of spring she was,
as she proposed we each write a poem
on dafferdills. “I wandered lonely as a cloud …”
sprang to mind, except, Miss remarked,
William Wordsworth beat me to it.
Fair enough. So, some you win, some …
you lose. Who can blame a girl for trying?
And so, my gaze strayed toward the window.
“Don’t day-dream, Daphne,” she scolded.
Felt like saying, “Your loss not mine, Miss,”
if she was that short-sighted she couldn’t see
beyond the end of her nose. Amongst the grass
under the trees, there was a load of them.
Who needs poems, when beauty speaks for itself?
Comments
jennifer | March 2, 2009 - 20:16
So funny, especially since I am about to use Wordsworth's 'The Daffodils' in a lesson on poetry essays!
hehe!
'Who needs poems, when beauty speaks for itself?' *cough*!
J x
Nathan Bednarek | March 3, 2009 - 00:18
A very enjoyable read. You never fail to amaze me. Well done.
Nathan.
Silver Spun Sand | March 3, 2009 - 11:44
You need to take something for the cough, Jennifer:-)
Seriously though, hope the lesson went well.
T X
Silver Spun Sand | March 3, 2009 - 11:45
And you, me:-)
Glad you enjoyed it. I do luv a nice bunch of dafferdills:-)
Tina x
MistakenMagic | March 3, 2009 - 19:18
A lovely little snap shot Tina! Love the beginning - hilarious!
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | March 3, 2009 - 19:35
Ta, Magic:-)
Tina xxx
luigi_pagano | March 4, 2009 - 15:09
Consensus has that you too have scored with this delightful poem, dear Tina.
You have the knack of a storyteller who engages the listener with wonderful and amusing tales.
Luigi xxx
Silver Spun Sand | March 4, 2009 - 21:36
It takes one to know one, I guess. Eh, Luigi? ;-)
Thank you.
Tina xxx
Curse of 222 | March 19, 2009 - 22:51
this is a wonderful read. loved the whimsical syntax, and the last line is deliciously ironic.
jason
Curse of 222 | March 19, 2009 - 22:53
this is a wonderful read. loved the whimsical syntax, and the last line is deliciously ironic.
jason
Denzella | March 29, 2012 - 20:21
Hello Tina,
911 Reads. No wonder one has to make an appointment to comment on your poems!
Loved this one! But if teacher wouldn't allow 'I wandered lonely as a cloud'
What about I wandered about a bit...I bet you could turn that into something magically poetic! I'm beginning to think Wordsworth is feeding you the lines.
Wonderful!
Moya
Silver Spun Sand | March 30, 2012 - 10:51
Hi there, Moya;-)
Thanks so much for reading this, and for your lovely comment. More than obliged.
Tina