Going for Silver


from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Can picture her eyes to this day –
like sunbeams, spritzing
the spokes of a brand new bike.
When she laughed, she’d cup
her hand to her mouth, as if
rescuing a moth, trapped
inside a lamp.

Made me feel I counted...
took an interest when I talked...
touch my arm, once in a while,
make it feel good to be me,
like I could do anything...
if I really wanted.

Different from my folks
who didn’t give a tinker’s cuss
about what I was up to –
long as I stayed out of their hair;
a clip round the ear, all I got
when Dad rolled home
from the pub.

After school we’d chat...
sometimes play hopscotch
on the street. I’d hide
her bag, pull her plaits...
anything to tease; she took it
in her stride. ‘Could charm
the birds right out the trees’,
with her sweet-talking ways.

One day sticks in my mind...
the end of term disco;
she wore a star-spangled top.
I’d walked her to the corner
of her road, then her lips met mine,
like in the movies. Not an ordinary
kiss; one of those French ones –
gave a whole new dimension
to the girl with the silver tongue.

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Comments

threeleafshamrock | July 20, 2011 - 12:58

mmmm, lovely Tina; almost like the trailer for a movie, where a huge story is captured in small space. Romantic, sad, with lots of hidden promise...but not slushy.
You only have one drawer in your writing file cabinet; the 'Top Drawer!'

Chris ;)

Silver Spun Sand | July 20, 2011 - 15:42

Chris - thanks for your lovely comment;-) More than appreciated.

Tina ;-)x

ScoZen | July 20, 2011 - 16:09

Delightful, all of it.

Highhat | July 20, 2011 - 17:16

like that word "spritzing" has a nice twang to it- full of viguor. This was as beautiful as one can expect from you Tina but new and fresh. I enjoy anything you write and it always amazes me that you have something new in every single poem. Thank you for a great read.I think most of us know about the first (french)kiss-- ha ha

;)Pia

Silver Spun Sand | July 20, 2011 - 17:43

And so your comment, ScoZen. Thank you;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | July 20, 2011 - 17:44

I think you're probably right there, Pia;-)

So pleased you enjoyed and thanks, so very much, for your kind words.

Tina

skinner_jennifer | July 21, 2011 - 16:23

I really enjoyed reading this one Tina.

Jenny.

Silver Spun Sand | July 21, 2011 - 18:10

Many thanks, Jenny;-) Much appreciated

Tina