The walls – ripe with mould...
once pink as a Spring, madder rose
in the house which once you sowed
in a field of rye, seems but moments
ago. A battery of black-backed
crows take my form, that I may gaze
through an Autumn mist of shadows,
at the shiver of corkscrew curls,
and the ripple of sinews, seeing you
scything, and sawing in the strumming,
and the humming of a summer’s dawn.
Until winter comes around again,
and I sidle back to those riddled,
ribboned hills, that reclaimed all I had,
filling me with the abyss of your absence...
And I bring you, a pocket, brimful
with blueberry orchids, sprung from the dust
of greying bones...their unkissed,
pouting lips, paling in a maelstrom
of memories, trapped in a skewered,
time-tortured dusk.
Comments
blighters rock | January 5, 2012 - 00:50
Wowzer. That hit me. The wording is beautifully threaded, lazily blown, almost still in the air like the lingering smoke of a freshly lit cigar in a damp, sunlit room, the muffled calling of migrating birds foghorned down the chimney. Exquisite poetry.
Highhat | January 5, 2012 - 06:01
I second Blighters eloquent comment. I was quite bowled over by this one Tina- more than usual. Stunning.
;)Pia
jolono | January 5, 2012 - 08:16
I third it! ( Is that possible?). Anyway its bloody good.
threeleafshamrock | January 5, 2012 - 10:13
Beautiful!
Memories - even though they sometimes bring sadness and a sense of loss, we still call them 'friends', for where would we be without them?
Gorgeous piece Tina, the sentiment is palpable and holds the reader's hand, to the end.
Chris xxx
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 11:18
Many thanks, blighter's;-) Your lovely words, a poem in themselves.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 11:20
Gosh, Pia...I hope you have quite recovered from being 'bowled over'.
Seriously though, many thanks. Pleased you enjoyed it so much.
Tina;-)
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 11:21
Yes...I am sure you can 'third' something. If you can't, you should bloody well be able to;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 11:22
Great to hear from you, Chris;-) Hope you and yours are well. Pleased this had such an impact on you, and I really appreciate your lovely comment.
Tina xxx
oldpesky | January 5, 2012 - 11:29
Happy New year Tina. I see you have started off the new year in your usual prolifically brilliant manner. Well done
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 11:37
And a very happy New Year to you, old pesky;-)
Thank you for reading and for taking the trouble to comment so kindly.
Tina
h jenkins | January 5, 2012 - 12:06
I really like this, Tina. Soft and subtle imagery and some lovely alliterations.
Helvigo Jenkins
MistakenMagic | January 5, 2012 - 13:43
Some really brilliant sound-patterning in this one Tina - love the alliteration and assonance. A compact but beautiful poem. Well done on the cherry!
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 14:25
I must thank you, sincerely, Helvigo, both for reading and for your words.
Tina;-)
Silver Spun Sand | January 5, 2012 - 14:27
Thank you so very much, Magic. I thought you might notice the alliteration, etc. and you did;-)
Tina xxx
Cavalcaderl | January 5, 2012 - 19:20
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Tina, just comment the way it comes from me!
What! a perfect poem of images and words so
clever full of descriptive things and memories
Interwovened. Excellently written.
And on the cherries! well done.
So many words I have not heard of even.
Very gusty! winds here, have you.
Happy New Year 2012.
julie xx
Indrani Ananda | January 7, 2012 - 18:25
Indrani Ananda
I've just read this Tina. There are so many vivid images in these stanzas it's like watching a film. I particularly liked "The strumming and the humming of a Summer's dawn', it struck a chord with me. Very atmospheric indeed.
Indrani.
Silver Spun Sand | January 7, 2012 - 19:01
Well, thank you indeed, Indrani. Much appreciated;-)
Tina
skinner_jennifer | January 7, 2012 - 22:36
Hi Tina,
a beautiful, haunting piece of writing, with memories
of another time. Very vivid and taking the reader
right in to a picture of words.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | January 8, 2012 - 15:27
My word you have been busy reading, dear Jenny;-)
Thanks so much, and am pleased that you enjoyed this one as well.
Tina