On the top of Dunstable Downs
taking a comfort break
on our way back
from London to Luton –
two performing arts
under-graduates.
Not a breath of wind
nor a cloud in the sky.
Venus in alignment
with Mars;
Sirius – never flashing
as bright.
In line of duty
we’d been to see
'The Silver Tassie'.
Courtesy of our neighbours,
and their addiction
for clean, shiny cars.
An opera of limited appeal;
even still –
didn’t want the night
to end...
to slip through our fingers
like a dream –
half imagined
half
forgotten.
The crickets were our strings,
the sheep
in a nearby field –
our baritones;
the midges –
indomitable sopranos
in our, ‘Opera of the Stars’,
lit by an August moon.
On the back seat
of my beat-up Ford Mondeo,
it shed a different light –
gave a whole new dimension,
to the girl
with the silver tongue.
Comments
chuck | May 20, 2009 - 00:35
You're amazing SSS. Love the hedgerow orchestra.
Dynamaso | May 20, 2009 - 06:10
This is simply beautiful. I enjoyed the last two stanzas the most. Excellent work, as usual.
Silver Spun Sand | May 20, 2009 - 09:42
So did I;-)
Thanks, chuck.
SSS
Silver Spun Sand | May 20, 2009 - 09:43
A poem I enjoyed writing, very much. Glad you enjoyed the read, Dynamaso;-)
Tina
Nathan Bednarek | May 20, 2009 - 13:41
'like a dream –
half imagined
half
forgotten.'
Wonderful. You always manage to find just the right words to express a thought or an emotion and you have a wonderful skill of putting it in just the right setting or time.
Beautiful as always. Well done!
Love, Nathan.
MistakenMagic | May 20, 2009 - 14:17
Wow! Love the inclusion of astronomy - very reminiscent of Ted Hughes! And yes, I too love the 'hedgerow orchestra'! Well done Tina - another 'little gem' ;)
Magic xxx
sunshine | May 20, 2009 - 18:17
Another good 'un and very evocative. Nice work. Margot
Silver Spun Sand | May 21, 2009 - 07:39
Nathan - its good to 'hear' your silver tongue too;-)
My thanks to you for reading and for those words.
Love, Tina x
Silver Spun Sand | May 21, 2009 - 07:41
Ted Hughes! Now you are talking poetry.
'The hedgerow orchestra' is in fine voice this morning, too;-) Many thanks for reading.
Tina xxx
Silver Spun Sand | May 21, 2009 - 07:43
Margot - you certainly brought a ray of sunshine to me this morning. Your comments always more than appreciated.
Tina
Curse of 222 | May 21, 2009 - 23:40
"An opera of limited appeal;
even still –
didn’t want the night
to end...
to slip through our fingers
like a dream –
half imagined
half
forgotten."
i particularly enjoy this stanza. it stands out as having a different pace and feel than the rest. the whole piece is well-written, and reads smooth and dreamy, not unlike an August night.
congrats on the cherry!
jason
Silver Spun Sand | May 22, 2009 - 07:41
Jason - thank you so very much. You read, so empathetically, and I really appreciate your comments;-)
Tina
sarah wilson | May 22, 2009 - 11:17
What can I say - I loved it!!
Silver Spun Sand | May 22, 2009 - 11:54
You've said it all, sarah...and thank you;-)
Tina
Steve | May 24, 2009 - 07:15
There's a real sparkle to your writing. It's also very nicely and sharply cut.
Silver Spun Sand | May 24, 2009 - 07:36
Hi there, Steve. There is a real sparkle to this Sunday morning, too - at least where I live;-)
I wish you a very sunny Sunday, and thank you so much for your kind comment.
Tina
threeleafshamrock | May 24, 2009 - 08:30
Don't know how I missed this the first time around but glad I looked it up now. At the risk of sounding repetitive; you paint a lovely poem and this time with an orchestra added ;) Lovely work as usual; you will have to open a cherry stall. Well done lovely Tina.
Chris XX
Silver Spun Sand | May 24, 2009 - 18:09
Chris - so glad you enjoyed the orchestra. And I've just had a bowl of cherries for my dessert today;-)
Seriously though, your kind words appreciated.
Tina xxx