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Name's Roxanne (I.P.)

Posted by Silver Spun Sand on February 15, 2010 - 16:41
from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Window shopping, are we, handsome?
Only looking? No – please; don’t walk away.
Already, those eyes of yours undress me;
be my guest, sir, or maybe you’d prefer
a guided tour?

Figure’s – OK. Not too fat and not too thin;
turned a few heads in my younger days and yet
I admit my boobs have taken a bit of a nosedive.
Make-up’s gone to pot this time of night,
and my hair could do with a wash.

Thighs – slight touch of cellulite but not bad
for my age...apart from the scar I got, climbing
a tree as a child. Oh, and the stretch-marks; blame
it on my kids, but I wouldn’t be without them
for all the tea in China.

Don’t mind you seeing me as nature intended;
best to comply with the Sale of Goods Act;
my merchandise, albeit shop-soiled, is value
for money. What you see is what you get.
Honest to a fault – me!

See that sign over there, ‘Plenty More Bargains
In-store’. So, step inside, love, but before you do,
read the other one by the door, ‘Handle with care;
all breakages to be paid for,’ as Mum would say,
setting out her market stall.

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Comments

Nathan Bednarek | February 15, 2010 - 17:57

'I admit my boobs have taken a bit of a nosedive.'

One of the funniest lines I read in a long time! ;-D

This is just brilliant. You really captured the personality of 'Roxanne' beautifully. She seems like an ordinary, yet very charming person. I love that!

A big well done from me ;-)

Nathan xox

Silver Spun Sand | February 15, 2010 - 18:19

;-) You picked the line closest to my heart, dear Nathan.

Thanks for reading, and glad it tickled you, as they say.

Tina xox

Beeme | February 15, 2010 - 22:05

I really like this, it's the narrator again, so strong, alive and believable. Much enjoyed.

Smiled a lot reading these lines;
'Oh, and the stretch-marks; blame
it on my kids, but I wouldn’t be without them
for all the tea in China.'

Beeme XX

Silver Spun Sand | February 15, 2010 - 23:10

...'not for all the tea in China'...and so I wouldn't;-)

Beeme - thank you. Long may you continue to shine.

Tina XX

Cavalcaderl | February 15, 2010 - 23:31

new Silver-spun-sand
Like it all
Stanza for me
I admit my boobs
have taken a bit of
of a nosedrive.
Make-up's gone to pot
this time of night.
I experience that to.
julie x

Silver Spun Sand | February 16, 2010 - 08:53

Thank you for popping by, Julie;-) Glad it made you smile;-)

Tina x

shoe | February 16, 2010 - 10:01

Lovely wry humour, especially like the last stanza,

Silver Spun Sand | February 16, 2010 - 10:54

Thanks a million, Shirley. Glad you enjoyed;-)

Tina

MistakenMagic | February 16, 2010 - 17:34

Roxanne has to be one of my favourite ever characters of yours, Tina! She's a woman of the world and no doubt about that ;) A brilliant poetic monologue and great take on this week's IP!

Magic xxx

rjnewlyn | February 17, 2010 - 01:05

I've only just twigged the 'I.P.' system. I have great admiration for anyone who can deliver to order as you do here. I'm not sure I can comment on the 'nosedive' line. My favourite was the last phrase taking the reader back to her mother again and opening up a whole life-course / ancestry thing - the idea that she was once a child and listening to her mother, I suppose. A wonderful moment.

Silver Spun Sand | February 17, 2010 - 08:46

Thanks Magic;-) She is definitely one of of mine too. Thought you might enjoy this and I am glad you did.

Tina xxx

Silver Spun Sand | February 17, 2010 - 08:49

You made me smile with this, rj;-) and yes, the least said about that nosedive the better!

I am so pleased that you appreciated this one to the full. It means very much and I thank you.

Tina