Two brothers and a dog in a tent,
camping out in their own back-yard.
Mum had said, “Don’t forget –
torches off by ten. I shall check, mind!”
Surreptitiously, night swoops down,
Cimmerian winged – enveloping all,
and the sky falls dark above the trees.
Deprived of their TV – instead they chat
of galaxies, giant-reds, black-holes...
Gazing at the stars – saucer-eyed.
“Did you know,” says one, “lots of the stars
are already dead...ages ago, long before
you and me were born?
That means, what we’re seeing now,
may not actually exist. Sometime soon
the Little Dipper could disappear.
What if we run out of stars completely?
What of future generations?
Will there be some left?”
“Not sure,” comes the reply. “Let’s check
with Mum...in the morning.”
“Oh, yes; I think so,” she says. Even for them...
two boys and a dog in a tent, camped out
beneath a soft, September moon.
Comments
richielee70 | November 17, 2009 - 11:11
another brilliant piece of work !
Silver Spun Sand | November 17, 2009 - 11:38
Thank you, richie! Glad you liked it and thank you too, for telling me;-)
Tina
Cavalcaderl | November 17, 2009 - 19:18
New Silver-spun-sand
Wow! another great one amazing
stanza Deprived of their TV-
instead they chat of galaxies
giant-reds,black-holes..
Gazing at the stars-saucer eyed.
Brilliant.Loved it all.
we used to run out of 1/- in slot?
julie xx (:-
Silver Spun Sand | November 17, 2009 - 19:29
Julie, thank you:-)
Tina x
Nathan Bednarek | November 17, 2009 - 22:24
Reminds me of my childhood ;-) Thanks for bringing that back ;-x
That's one thing I absolutely hate about London- I can never appreciate the night sky for its splendour. That's typical for large cities... unfortunately ;-(
As always, a big well done!
Nathan xox
Nick.A | November 17, 2009 - 23:51
#Nathan, you are so right, they've stolen our sky! Lovely poem - very evocative.
Nick
tcook | November 18, 2009 - 11:07
Julie,
It's a discussion - that's all at the moment - do not worry!
Silver Spun Sand | November 18, 2009 - 11:37
There you are, Julie...you heard it from the horse's mouth, so to speak;-)
As Tony, says nothing for you to worry about. Don't get blown away today, Julie. I've already had a fence down and a few tiles of the roof. Hang on to your hat!!
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | November 18, 2009 - 11:40
You hit the nail on the head, Nathan. Whenever I used to go back to London to visit my Dad, I missed the sky so very much. And although I was only gone for a day, mostly, I felt really boxed in.
We are lucky now, where we live. A little bungalow plus acres and acres of sky, which my husband takes full advantage of with his telescope and camera... taking pictures of all the heavenly bodies he can find;-)
My thanks to you for reading. Glad you enjoyed.
Tina xxx
Silver Spun Sand | November 18, 2009 - 11:41
Nice one, Nick;-) Thanks for reading. So glad you liked it.
Tina
Cavalcaderl | November 18, 2009 - 14:21
Silver-Sun-Span
well done and congratulations
on the cherry!
great love the words and stanzas.
Thankyou very much answering and
as I'm new all headings don't know.
Ray did all lovely mugs.Sorry hear
gale your end pretty rough here.
Strange you say hang onto hat!
got fabulous one had sold out
Primark something made me go on
back like Cheryl Cole X Factor
black small orange size net pulls
over face bit,and feather little band
goes under back really long hair.Made
my day in wind £6 most £30 shops bigger.
Love it.well one have pay would't they Radio
or Actor, or Books. friend mine over £100 publish
then had to sell more.This is great Abctales.
But one can't afford publish can they even if not
properly done.fun.Everyone is writing books mainly
celebrities.My mother's relation had telescope in garden too.and long term friend Frank went Tower! locally stars and planets see.
julie xx
Going out presently.
julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | November 18, 2009 - 17:05
Thank you for the congratulations, Julie. It was a poem I really enjoyed writing and I am pleased that you enjoyed it too.
Tina ;-)x
MistakenMagic | November 19, 2009 - 20:23
Hello Tina! What a way to start my catch-up on ABC! Loved this stanza:
'Deprived of their TV – instead they chat
of galaxies, giant-reds, black-holes...
Gazing at the stars – saucer-eyed.'
took me right back to year 11 physics! Well done on the cherry ;)
Magic xxx
Cavalcaderl | November 20, 2009 - 08:16
new tcook
Hi! Tony Thankyou.ok.
well naturally was concerned.
all work out whatever sure!
I thought was poem at first
cut it down?now.
Hot chestnuts B/ton selling
Buses congested so walked.
julie x cavalcader (:-
Silver Spun Sand | November 20, 2009 - 08:28
Magic - so glad you enjoyed this one and that it brought back memories for you;-)
Tina xxx
Cavalcaderl | November 23, 2009 - 00:30
New Silver-spun-sand
H!
thankyou cut it down ok
Hot chestnuts sold
B/ton I walked
home good hour
buses congested.
all up hill.Ray got cuppa
tea for me.got scent.
so feet up trying new thing!
to-day. I Remember hurricane here
trees park down, and red squirrels
gone.Hope all is mending gales
we had tiles of once make a noise
don't they.take care.
Remember "Some Enchanted Evening"song
and one called "The Story Of Tina"
julie x
Cavalcaderl | November 23, 2009 - 21:50
new Silver-spun-sand
you mention your in lovely
bungalow, well that's what
my 2 beloved's later in life
have to have, do you get what
I'm saying they have their house
moment, bungalow fell through not
worth thinking about what will be will be
there so young got 3 cat's.
love julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | November 23, 2009 - 22:10
Ah yes, Julie. 'Some enchanted evening' - from South Pacific and 'The Story of Tina' - Al Martino, if my memory serves me correctly. What a memory you have!
I am sure that one day, your loved ones' dreams will come true and for their three cats as well;-)
Have a peaceful evening.
Tina xx
Cavalcaderl | November 25, 2009 - 11:00
Silver-spun-sand
Julie says not sure was it "Rozzana Brazzi"
can't spell it. on cover memories bad once 2 days
ou for count coma wham girl friend's full working
in order single going into office, speed down hill
round corner. Memories poor.one time all could do
sent you long comment after your kind one about bungalow. three times hit button finished gone1
so did all again interesting. amazing, lucky!
julie.xx I have said delete all if think so.
If it's under one your magnificent poems1.or lost.
I know it said Novl 23rd from you.all ok found.