Spring never ever came that year –
the year he left...Funny
but sometimes, I think I see him
across the street...
I run to catch him up – touch
his shoulder
and it’s only a stranger’s face, turns
to confront me.
Ask myself, why I keep searching –
kidding myself...
and then I feel his hand on mine,
but, oh – those scars
are still so tender; they’ll never heal.
I hear him speak my name...
feel his lips brushing mine – then
“Lean on me...” says another.
“I’ll be your rock, and always
will be; don’t you know that?
I’d move mountains for you...
Give you the moon, if you wanted.”
“He’s a ‘brick’. You’d be a fool
to let him go,” or so they tell me.
How to tell them, our daffodils, dug
that year, didn’t bloom again this spring,
and how to tell this one, I don’t need
all his bullshit...
It’s not a rock, or a brick, or the moon
I want. Just a pillow.
Comments
Beeme | July 23, 2011 - 20:41
This is stunning, so beautiful and poignant Tina. More than well done.
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 23, 2011 - 20:51
Thanks, Beeme. Good of you to read and to let me know you liked;-) Have a great weeekend.
Tina xx
RachelPatricia | July 23, 2011 - 21:25
It’s not a rock, or a brick, or the moon
I want. Just a pillow.
Wow, is all I can say to this, Tina - so, so beautiful and moving, really enjoyed this :)
Rachel xx
well-wisher | July 24, 2011 - 01:42
I thought this was an interesting take on the IP,
I especially liked the last verse.
JoHn
Silver Spun Sand | July 24, 2011 - 06:53
Thanks, Rachel;-)
Pleased you enjoyed.
Tina xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 24, 2011 - 06:55
Pleased you liked this one;-) Many thanks.
Tina
skinner_jennifer | July 24, 2011 - 11:16
A real strong poem this is Tina, telling it just
how it is. I really like the way you express the
feelings towards this man.
Great take on the IP.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | July 24, 2011 - 11:18
Many thanks, Jenny;-) Have a lovely Sunday.
Tina
insertponceyfre... | July 24, 2011 - 14:08
I especially liked the final stanza too - well done Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 24, 2011 - 18:14
Insert - very much appreciated. Thank you;-)
Tina
fatboy74 | July 24, 2011 - 21:44
Excellent Tina. :-)
MistakenMagic | July 24, 2011 - 22:16
I love the the two-line structure here, Tina. So many beautiful lines - and a real tenderness. Well done on the cherry! :)
Magic xxx
Cavalcaderl | July 24, 2011 - 23:12
new Silver-Spun-Sand
many congrats; on the good poem
I have just read well explained of feelings.
Liked all of it. Especially how thought you saw the person, turn round not him. I have done that too once, days pop was alive passed by on his bike, called him not him.
Have a good week-end. /and tell us how the anniversary went, did you sit at the piano and play,
so clever to do that.
julie xx
barryj1 | July 25, 2011 - 01:06
I, too, was caught up in the last two lines, the way they summed up the inchoate, elemental need. Kurt Vonnegut (i.e. please forgive me for constantly quoting other writers) once said that we don't need more LOOOOVE; what's needed is a thimble full of common decency or, as you so aptly put it, 'just a pillow' and little else.
Highhat | July 25, 2011 - 03:33
Yes that would be a super man who could be just a pillow, wouldn't he!
a great one for the IP Tina- yet another belter.
hope it is sunny where you are today.
;)Pia
Overthetop1 | July 25, 2011 - 07:06
A brillaint use of the(IP) which I can never do. lovely,very true & (my `in' word at the moment I'm afraid) evocative. Many congrats on the cherry.
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:02
Pleased you thought so, fb;-) Many thanks. Tina;-)
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:03
Hi there, Magic. Hope things are well for you.
Pleased you liked this one, and thanks, so very much, for letting me know.
Have a good week;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:05
Hi Julie! Had a lovely anniversary, thank you, and yes, I did play the piano...one of the lovely pieces from 'The Piano' by Michael Nyman, actually. 'The Heart Asks Pleasure First'...so now you know;-)
Have a good week.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:06
...a nice 'Siberian Goose Down', would be great;-)
Pleased you enjoyed,Pia, and at the moment we have sunshine, so am keeping my fingers crossed for the rest of the day;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:08
Please don't every stop quoting other writers, barry. I am learning so much with your every comment,so keep up the good work;-)
So glad you liked this, and many thanks for telling me in your own inimitable style;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 25, 2011 - 09:09
OTT - thank you. As you said before we all have our own way of writing and our very own 'fortes' and you have most certainly found yours;-)
Tina