Three years had passed since Kate had last seen
Raymond, now here he was standing at her front door. She thought he looked so pale, she hardly
recognized him.
"What are you doing here?" she enquired of him.
"Why have you come back after so long?"
Raymond seemed anxious.
"I need to speak with you Kate, it's really important."
"Well you had better come in," she replied.
Raymond followed Kate into the kitchen. She wanted
to get to the bottom of this visit.
"Well come on Raymond speak to me, tell me why you
feel the need to come back after all this time?"
Raymond started to fidget nervously, playing with
his fingers, he bit his lip.
"Its not what you think Kate, I haven't come here
to rekindle our relationship. Hell! I really hate
to say this, but it's about your brother Lawrence."
Kate stared at Raymond.
"What about Lawrence, where is he? it's been so
long since we last saw him, mum and dad have been
frantic these past years."
She started to pace the room. Raymond grabbed her
arm, "where to start, it's so difficult?"
Kate came face to face with Raymond, her hands on
her hips.
"Why don't you just start at the beginning."
Raymond sat down at the kitchen table, Kate sat
opposite him.
"Well come on then," she was getting agitated.
Raymond proceeded to explain:
"Three years ago Lawrence approached me, while I
was on one of my morning jogs, you know how I used
to love jogging."
Kate smiled and nodded. Raymond continued.
"As you probably remember I didn't like being
disturbed while out jogging, but Lawrence was adamant that he needed to talk with me, so we stopped off in the park and bought a couple of
coffees. Sitting on one of the park benches, he
started to tell me of his future plans, he said
he intended on going to work in Spain, but he didn't want to go alone. He pleaded with me to go
with him, well I was down on my luck at the time,
you and I had split up, I just felt like I wasn't
going anywhere, there wasn't anything keeping me
in England, so then and there I agreed that it would be a great idea."
Kate interrupted Raymond.
"Why didn't you at least let me know where Lawrence
was?"
Raymond looked at Kate.
"Because he told me not to say anything to you."
Kate sighed. "Well so much for brotherly love,
anyway go on."
"Well I told Lawrence I would need to renew my
passport, so there was no way we would beable to go
straight away."
"That's fine," he said.
"You get your passport sorted and I'll sort out the
plane tickets."
"Two months later we were touching down in Spain."
Kate questioned Raymond once again.
"So what did you do for money and what about jobs?"
"I'm just getting around to that," Raymond said.
"We managed to get jobs in one of the hotels, with
board aswell, we were very lucky, it was almost to
good to be true. Lawrence managed to get a day time
job as a waiter in the hotel restaurant, he only
had to work five hours a day, it was a doddle, I
managed to get a job working in the hotel grounds
as a gardener.
We worked in Spain for two and half years, we had
a great time, but we didn't really make any close
friends, you know what Lawrence was like, he didn't
really socialise that much, but we did meet a
couple who owned a local bar, that we started
hanging out in, they were a nice couple named
Celia and Jack, they seemed to take a shine to us,
we bought them drinks and they did the same for us.
One paticular evening we were sitting around the
bar, having a good time, when Jack asked us if we
fancied coming over to their place for supper the
following night, Lawrence was up for it, so we said
okay."
"You come around about 7.30pm," said Jack,
"you know where we live, don't you?"
"Yeah! okay," said Lawrence, "see you around 7.30
tomorrow night then."
To be continued ..........

Comments
celticman | February 5, 2011 - 22:27
look forward to the next part.
skinner_jennifer | February 5, 2011 - 23:13
Thanks so much celticman for commenting and reading.
Jenny.
insertponceyfre... | February 6, 2011 - 07:12
Jenny - this is prose right? It's just the layout seems to suggest that it's poetry, and I'm not sure why, or how you could change that. It's a bit confusing and it detracts from the story, which I'm enjoying by the way!
skinner_jennifer | February 6, 2011 - 11:00
Hi Insert,
I am glad that you are enjoying the story so far.
It's strange but I got this idea in my head for
this story and I have gone over and over it, but
I cannot think of any other way of explaining it.
I hope that all will become clear, as the story
progresses, although the prose does continue in the
same way I'm afraid. Oh well! I do try. But again
thankyou for your comments, they are much appreciated.
Jenny.
insertponceyfre... | February 6, 2011 - 11:49
I hope you don't think it's the story itself that I'm criticising jenny? I think it's very enjoyable. It just looks as if it's laid out on the page like a poem - like you'd pressed "poetry" instead of "prose" when you posted the story - that's all.
skinner_jennifer | February 6, 2011 - 12:18
Thanks for getting back to me insert. Honestly I
didn't think you were criticising my work. I
appreciate any help I can get. I have never written
publicly until I came on to ABC Tales, I just
enjoyed writing for my own enjoyment, but since
coming onto ABC Tales, I have learnt so much.
At home there is know body I can ask for advice,
because they no even less than I do, so any advice
I can get here is very useful. Again thankyou for
your support, very much appreciated.
Jenny.
Prettyrose | February 6, 2011 - 13:32
hI Jenny :) I hope you are ok. Well written as always and well done for stretching out part two which for me was the eye catcher.It is like watching a film when they keep you in suspense for an hour on 1 single explanation, which I am sure is your intention :) It works great :)))
keep writing and Keep Smiling lololol
Silver Spun Sand | February 6, 2011 - 13:49
I agree, so much, with Prettyrose;-)
So when's Part 4 coming along? Shall look forward to it.
Tina
skinner_jennifer | February 6, 2011 - 14:03
Hi Prettyrose,
thankyou so much for your great comment. Do you
know I actually saw this as a film when I was
writing it, I had a picture in my head, I could
see the characters coming alive. It's so nice to
be able to write something that people actually
enjoy.
Thankyou again for reading and hope the rest of
the story lives up to expectation.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 6, 2011 - 14:09
Hi Tina,
Wow! it's a great compliment to me, that you are
reading this, you will never know how much I
appreciate your words. You have been an insperation
to me, since I have been on here. This story is very
different, I have gone in a completely different
direction, so when I saw your comment I was very
pleased that you liked it.
I can only write three pieces of work in 24 hours,
so the rest I will put on here, either Monday or
Tuesday.
Thankyou so much again for your comments and reading.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | February 6, 2011 - 14:16
Thanks for that, Jenny. Shall wait with 'bated breath', as they say;-)
Tina