THE CHOSEN ONES ( PART FIFTY EIGHT )


from the ABC set Stories

Addie left the Control room, he walked back along
the corridor towards his son's room.

Opposite Luke's door, was the living quarters, again Addie placed his left hand onto the pad and
his left eye towards the beam of light, releasing
the door.

As he entered, he pressed a button on the wall, the
screen on the monitor came on, then he pressed
another and his son's room appeared on the screen,
everything seemed quiet and okay, so he turned it
off.

The living quarters were very open plan, but
comfortable. There were no ornaments or knick-knacks, not even a picture.

The air conditioning kept the room at a constant
temperature, there was also a built in dehumidifier.

There were four comfortable loungers and a long
glass table with chairs.

To the right, was a kitchen with many gadgets,
everything could be done, by voice control, even
down to turning the oven off and on.

Straight ahead were glass doors, which went the
whole length of the room. Beyond the doors...was
a Conservatory, which then led into the domed
garden.

To the right of the Conservatory was a raised,
concrete pond, with a small waterfall, which fed
its way down. From the waterfall, were different
levels, candles sat on ledges and in little nooks.
Crystals had been placed in the concrete, to create
a beautiful effect.

Addie opened one of the glass doors, leading into
the domed garden.

Lena turned to face Addie, "how's Luke, did he get
off to sleep okay?"

"Straight away, I've just checked his room, he's
sleeping soundly. Look I'm just going off to relax,
I need to wind down before sleep, will you be okay?"

"Yes I'll be fine, I think I'll be going to bed
myself soon."

Addie came back in, closed the glass door, then
made his way to the kitchen, he poured himself some
water, then walked back outside into the corridor.

The room next to his son's, was their bedroom, again it was very basic, a bed...a bedside table on
each side. There was a door to the right of the bed, which led to a room where they kept their clothes, to the left was another door leading to a
bathroom, it was quite clinical and white.

He relieved himself, then returned to the bedroom,
changing into some loose clothing. He pressed a
button on the wall...a voice came on:-

"Good day to you." The voice spoke again. "I would
like you to get yourself comfortable and prepared
to relax."

Addie lay on the bed. The voice spoke again. "I
would like you to concentrate on your breathing.
Take a deep breath in, now bring your arms up...
and over your head, now flex your feet and stretch.
Okay exhale and bring your arms down by your side.

I want you to forget the day's activities, or any
worries, concentrate on your breathing.

Now imagine you are letting go, any tension in your
body is released. Your whole body is relaxing,
sinking, floating.

Your eyes are becoming very heavy, you need to close them, they become heavier...and heavier...
and heavier...your sinking further and further into
total relaxation."

As Addie lay there a hypnotic drone sound played out, which was then followed by some quiet relaxing
music.

Soon he was ready for sleep, pulling back the
bedding, he slipped in and was asleep almost
immediately.

To be continued ............

Discuss this piece in the abctales forum


Comments

Highhat | May 11, 2011 - 16:12

What a beautiful scene and scenery with the dome garden and the inevitable crystals. This is also very imaginative Jenny- I really enjoyed this little piece of Utopia. Very idyllic. You fit these pieces and chapters very well together.
There are a couple of tweaks
you have a knack of writing 'to' when it should be 'too' (as well)

"their bedroom"

Hope you don't mind me correxing you?
atb
;)Pia

Silver Spun Sand | May 11, 2011 - 20:42

I couldn't agree more with Pia, Jenny. You set an amazing scene with your words. Another thoroughly enjoyed chapter. Thank you;)

Tina

skinner_jennifer | May 12, 2011 - 09:50

Hi Pia,

thankyou for your help, I really do have a problem
with to and too, I don't mind you mentioning it,
could you tell me where I went wrong with the 'to,'
so I can change it to 'too.'

I'm pleased you enjoyed this part. The Crystal pond
is something I have dreamt of having, but Crystals
are really expensive, so I doubt if that will ever
happen, but you never know.

Again thankyou for your comment, please feel free to
let me know if there are any mistakes at all.

Jenny.

skinner_jennifer | May 12, 2011 - 09:55

Hi Tina,

thankyou for letting me know you enjoyed this part.
It's great that you are still enjoying, I hope you
have a great day today.

Thanks again for reading.

Jenny.

oldpesky | May 12, 2011 - 12:45

Like the others have said, a lovely scene depicting a slice of blissful life. Although, I have a feeling this is sort of like the calm before the storm. Looking forward to what happens next.

skinner_jennifer | May 12, 2011 - 13:48

Thankyou so much for your comment oldpesky, it's
great to know you have kept up with the story, I
just love to know that people are enjoying it,
makes it all worth while.

Thanks again.

Jenny.

Highhat | May 12, 2011 - 14:38

Oh so sorry Jenn it must have been the previous chapter- so sorry. But I did find another little error- 3rd last paragraph- Your should be you're (you are)-
It's just that the story is so perfect I want everything to be perfect about it. I hope you don't mind?
Keep writing Jenny- it's such a fantastic story- you should make a book out of it- it would be wonderful for all ages.
cheers

;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | May 12, 2011 - 16:12

Hi Pia,

thanks for getting back to me, please let me know if
you find any mistakes, I really do want to know and
I don't mind at all.

That would be great to have a book out of this story, but I don't think it will ever happen, there
are so many good books out there, much better than
this story. Still I suppose I can dream. To be
honest, I wouldn't have a clue how to go about getting a book published.

But that is really kind of you to say, I really do
appreciate it.

Thanks again,

Jenny.