THE CHOSEN ONES ( PART SIXTEEN )


from the ABC set Stories

Realising this was a child, Nathen said, "who are
you, where are you from?" The child now feeling
a lot braver answered, "me name's Ben, me ma's
dead, me pa's a prisoner, taken by hunters. The boy
started crying, sobbing he said, "they killed me
ma and I hid, I didn't come out for two days, I
was to frightened, I thought they would kill me too."

The boy then asked the man in the pit his name,
"my name is Nathen and I have a funny feeling that
your father was captured by the same man who pushed
me in this pit."
The boy looked surprised, "why did a man push you
in the pit?"
"because I refused to do his bidding, until I had
some food," Nathen replied. "Please!" said Nathen,
"is there anyway you can help me get out of this
pit?" At this point the boy became worried, he said, "how do I know you won't hurt me, if I help
you out of that pit?"
Nathen said, "I give you my honour, that nothing will happen. I can help you and you can help me."

But still Ben was not sure. "You know?" said Nathen, "I have a family, a wife, a son, a daughter, she is probably about your age, how old
are you?"
Ben looked at Nathen, smiling he said, "I'm twelve,
this is my twelfth summer, me ma said on the
morning I was born, the birds were singing so loudly, that you couldn't hear me ma's screams
as I was being born. It was such a hot day me pa lay me under a shady tree, he said I was a
large baby and strong, he named me Ben, under the
shady tree, because he said it was a strong name,
I was named after me pa's brother, who me pa was
close to. They would hunt together, they nearly
always knew what the other was thinking and could
feel if either of them was in danger."
The boy felt sad as he told Nathen of his family.

To be continued .........

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Comments

pinda | April 4, 2011 - 22:55

This is a great revelation, finally someone has found Nathen :D I can tell you contemplated a lot before introducing this young character, the small details about his family and his general personality overall of being 'brave' is a great addition to this already addictive read.

Carry on the great work Jennifer

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Pinda

skinner_jennifer | April 5, 2011 - 10:10

Thankyou so much Pinda, and sorry about the delay,
it's just my other half decided to take me away for
a couple of days, being as it was Mothers Day.

Thankyou for sticking with the story.

Jenny.

Silver Spun Sand | April 5, 2011 - 11:59

This is yet another cliffhanger, Jenny and you really know how to tug at the heart strings, don't you?

Looking forward to the next one, when you will let me down gently, I hope, not to mentions poor Nathen;-)

Tina

skinner_jennifer | April 5, 2011 - 12:12

Hi Tina,

so pleased you are still following the story, I
think it's nice if the reader is moved by a scene.

I hope you enjoy the following parts as much.

Thankyou for reading, always appreciated.

Jenny.

well-wisher | April 12, 2011 - 18:03

I like the subtle and realistic way that you build friendships and relationships between your characters.

Ben is an interesting character and it makes sense introducing an orphan into the story and pairing him with Nathen who is seperated from his children.

skinner_jennifer | April 13, 2011 - 12:20

Hi well-wisher,

you got it in one, yes I did feel that Nathen needed
a child to find him, so that he would not be so
lonely.

Thankyou again for your comment and reading, much
appreciated.

Jenny.