"Ben!" whispered Nathen, "do you think your father
would mind me having his spears?"
"Na! me pa would be glad you are getting use out of
them, you take em."
The full moon was shining down on the two new found
friends. Nathen knew the first thing he must do, was to get some food, so with the moon shining bright, Nathen went down to the river and speared a
couple of fish. They were so hungry, they tore the
flesh from the fish, then ate them raw.
"Do you think the hunters will return this way?" Ben said chewing on some fish.
"They could, but I think that we will be safe tonight," replied Nathen.
Nathen decided it would be safer if they found a
tree to sleep in for the night, so they started to
climb a really tall tree, that had a base in the
top part of the trunk, which was just large enough
for the two of them to snuggle down in. Nathen
threw a blanket over them, that he had found at
Ben's camp. "Night," whispered Ben.
"Night," whispered Nathen.
*************************************
Joshua ran off, through a thicket, as he did so,
Bruin thought, 'run, run be safe friend.'
Joshua thought as he ran, 'my only hope of staying
alive, is to stay close to the river.'
Although he was tired, his only thought was to get
as far away as possible, before Jonah found him gone.
As he ran, he kept glancing behind to see if he was
being followed, but no one came, 'How lucky,' he
thought.
The moon was full, he could see the river, as soon
as he reached the river, he started to run along the bank, he felt a shiver at how exposed he was,
but his only hope if anyone came, was to cover his
human smell by diving into the water.
Joshua could hold his breath for ages under water,
a trick his father had taught him, so he could catch more fish.
He felt like he had been running all night, his
hands hurt real bad, so he decided to bathe them in
the river, as he let the water run over his hands,
it felt good and cooling, he ripped a piece of cloth from his top, then used it to bandage his hands.
Joshua was quite tall and had once been muscular,
but because of being starved he had lost a lot of
muscle, his shoulder length dark hair fell thin
and loose around his shoulders, his dark tanned
body felt weak from digging. Joshua felt he had
lost his spirit, but he was determined he would be
free.
He had a drink from the river, then set off once
again. As he ran, he suddenly thought, 'what about
foot prints?' There was nothing for it, he would
have to go back a little way and clear them.
He found some branches and swept away his foot
prints, taking him self down the bank and into the
river.
As his body landed in the water, he breathed in,
the water was freezing, he shivered but started to
swim into the dark by the light of the moon.
To be continued ........
Comments
Highhat | April 7, 2011 - 17:15
This is unfolding itself in a very dramatic way Jenn. I worry about the good people but I will have to wait until they are joined together hopefully before too long- although I suppose that is the essence to keep us on the edge of our seats. I am so preoccupied with a fairy tale and this is pretty scary a lot of the time.
Oh well it is going well- good story telling still
atb
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | April 7, 2011 - 17:37
Hi Pia,
yes I know I do keep flitting a lot, but hopefully
it keeps it more interesting, a bit like in real
life, where there's always something going on in
different houses, every house has a story to tell,
if you know what I mean.
I do hope you can follow it okay, I don't want to
confuse anyone, it's just that in the story, the
people do travel around a lot.
Thanks for keeping up with the story.
Jenny.
Highhat | April 7, 2011 - 17:48
It's not confusing- it's just that they are all having such a bad time at the moment that I hope something good happens soon!! That's just me. I think it is easy to remember who is who- at least it's not like Dostojevski Ha ha
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | April 7, 2011 - 17:48
You really are fitting a lot in Jenny, but it does make it even more exciting.
(Just a small typo in the fourth paragraph after the line of asteriks. Should be 'no one came'.
You built the tension very well in this chapter, and the thought of swimming in the river at night with only the moon, really scary;-) You wouldn't catch me doing it at all. Frightened of my own shadow, that's me;-)
Thanks for another great read, Jenny.
Tina
skinner_jennifer | April 7, 2011 - 17:58
Hi Tina,
once again I'm thankful to you for helping me out.
Do you know I keep doing that, I find it very
difficult to realise where you put no and Know, Oh!
the English Language. I'm getting there slowly but
surely.
Anyway glad you are still following and enjoying.
No I wouldn't go swimming in freezing cold water,
not even by moonlight. This is one desperate man,
who needs to get away from that monster Jonah.
Just glad I'm not in the story. He, he!
Thanks again for reading, it's great to get your
feedback.
Jenny.
pinda | April 7, 2011 - 19:22
The introduction of yet another character =) I'm enjoying reading about Joshua's masculinity and determination to escape. Somehow I can imagine all three men joining forces to put an end to Jonah's evil empire. But that's for you to decide and for me not know until the next chapter :)
X
Pinda
PS- Just out of curiosity, are you developing this story as you write it or did you pre-plan a certain plot and group of characters?
SteveM | April 7, 2011 - 20:45
Hi Jenny, Just caught up with your story again. You've got the action going well, and the additional characters help to flesh it out. Looking forward to part 23.
Steve
SteveM | April 7, 2011 - 20:45
Hi Jenny, Just caught up with your story again. You've got the action going well, and the additional characters help to flesh it out. Looking forward to part 23.
Steve
sue dinum | April 7, 2011 - 21:04
It's going really well, Jenny and you have a lot of energy in the story. You are very prolific, I guess once the thread gets you it kind of writes itself. Are you finding that the characters are writing their own story, because once they assume a life of their own this is what happens and the writing becomes easier. Well done.
sue
skinner_jennifer | April 8, 2011 - 09:01
Hi Pinda,
thankyou for another wonderful comment.
In answer to your question, I started writing this
story three years ago, it started off with a dream
I had and has kind of developed from there. I have
written it, but have discovered since I have started
to write it on ABC Tales, that it needed a lot of
tweeking, so I have been going through the rough
copies and changing a lot. But yes the story is
almost completed, although not quite finished yet.
I definitely have the plot pre-planned, also the characters.
I hope that I have answered your question.
Thankyou again for reading.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | April 8, 2011 - 09:04
Hi Steve,
it's great to hear from you again, glad you are still
able to enjoy the story. It's good to know that you
can see the action coming out.
I do hope you have a great weekend.
Thanks for reading and your wonderful comment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | April 8, 2011 - 09:09
Hi sue,
that was such a nice thing to say, it has been a lot
of hard work, planning the structure of the story,
but for me it was great fun, because I'm enjoying
what I'm writing, that's the main thing, don't you
think?
I take your words as a great compliment, coming from
a proficient writer such as yourself.
Thankyou so much for reading and commenting, you know
I always appreciate it.
Have a good weekend.
Jenny.
oldpesky | April 8, 2011 - 12:27
Good afternoon Jenny,
I particularly like the way you have different threads running through this story and keep the suspense very high. Are you going to take the weekend off again and leave us hanging for a couple of days?
Highhat | April 8, 2011 - 13:06
This is hard work Oldpesky- give the lady a couple of days off and we will have Monday to look forward to. Sitting on the edge of our seats- oops
Ha ha
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | April 8, 2011 - 15:19
Hi Oldpesky,
Good afternoon to you, what a fine day it's been,
the weather here has been glorious.
I really value your appreciation of my story and
thankyou so much for commenting and reading.
I will be writing on Sunday or Monday, but not on
Saturday, afraid I've got things to do.
Hope I don't keep you in to much suspense, it's not
really my aim, but hope you will look forward to the
next installment.
You have a wonderful weekend, take care.
Jenny.