While you lay sleeping
in our bed of dreams,
I softly whispered
to that ancient moon,
sharing the secrets
that only we knew,
your Spiritual breathing
continues to comfort me,
like the motion of tide
the ebbing and flowing,
deep Ocean desires go on,
mystified I feel the water
cleanse my very soul...
so go deeper my love
dream away your dreams,
too soon we will kiss
dawns new rising day,
gathering of visions
just a fading memory,
So exhale early morning mist
as we await Sun's first kiss,
along shoreline hand in hand
you gave me the wedding band,
pearly skies reflect on Ocean
calm...as we walk arm in arm.
Comments
skinner_jennifer | October 8, 2011 - 15:19
Hi Tina,
Jenny here, thanks for the comment, glad I could
put you in a romantic mood, thankyou for reading
and letting me know.
Jenny.
Highhat | October 8, 2011 - 15:57
A slight mix-up Jenny-but I am very honoured Tina thought this was mine though I'd never be able to create such a beautiful poem as this. You have such a lovely serene rhythm to your poems Jenny- they flow so well and you use such wonderful images from nature.
I enjoyed this one too.
;)Pia
a couple of typos:
3. stanza- too soon
and last stanza- await Sun's first kiss
Cavalcaderl | October 8, 2011 - 16:00
new skinner_jennifer
Very well written. I like
the last stanza.
Made me smile an feel warm inside.
Not the weather, is it, what one does with it.
Have a good week-end.
julie xx
skinner_jennifer | October 8, 2011 - 16:37
Hi Pia,
thanks for your help with the mistakes, it reads
a lot better now.
I'm really glad you enjoyed reading this poem, it
was inspired by listening to Led Zepplin of all
things, although has absolutely nothing to do with
their music.
Glad you enjoyed and thankyou for your comment.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | October 8, 2011 - 16:40
This is so very beautiful, Pia, and has put me in a wonderfully romantic mood;-)
Oops just noticed;-) Says she, red-faced. Sorry, Pia and sorry Jenny.
All the stanzas are lovely, but my favourite is the third.
Much enjoyed.
Tina
skinner_jennifer | October 8, 2011 - 16:44
Hi there julie,
it's definitely cooler than it has been and I
suppose this poem is a bit more Summer than Autumn,
but it was just inspired by music.
That was nice that it made you smile and feel all
warm, a very comforting thought.
Thankyou for reading and letting me know.
Hope you have a peaceful weekend, take care.
Jenny. xx
Prettyrose | October 9, 2011 - 00:40
Hi Jenny :) I hope you are well :)
Another lovely, brilliant piece!!! loved it and who cares about the mistakes lol.Because in a work of pure art, there is only perfection.
Keep Writing
Keep Smiling :)
Trish xx
skinner_jennifer | October 9, 2011 - 12:33
Hi Trish,
I really do appreciate you reading this poem and for
you kind comment. I'm glad you liked it and thankyou
for telling me.
Jenny.xx
skinner_jennifer | October 9, 2011 - 12:34
Hi Tina,
don't worry about the name mix up, it's easily done
and I'm just glad you enjoyed reading it.
Jenny.
Kahdai | October 17, 2011 - 17:41
Lovely Jenny so peacful and calm- definately a music inspired writing :)
skinner_jennifer | October 17, 2011 - 20:10
You are a real treasure Kahdai, your reading and
comments are truely appreciated.
Thankyou so much.
Jenny.
Kahdai | October 19, 2011 - 20:38
^^
ScoZen | October 26, 2011 - 19:20
Hello Jen nice this one.
That's the best time to walk along a beach as the
"...dawns new rising day..." and in the "...early morning mist..."
skinner_jennifer | October 27, 2011 - 11:04
Thanks ScoZen, it must be wonderful living by the
sea, to live so close to beable to experience the
early morning mist.
Thankyou so much for reading and letting me know
your thoughts.
Jenny.
Kahdai | October 28, 2011 - 20:43
foggy here by the river too!
skinner_jennifer | October 29, 2011 - 10:21
Hi Kahdai,
I know what you mean about the fog yesterday, it
took ages to lift, but when it finally did we had
some wonderful sunshine not to hot to walk in, which
is what I love about this time of the year.
Hope you're having a good weekend.
Jenny.