A daughter's Lament

Good story, Jenny with some wonderful vivid imagery and memorable lines.

I especially liked:

"a candle black upon her lap..."

"a tear runs down her Mother's grave,"

"as tracing the candle through time and space"

aswell as the whole of the last stanza:

as Sun sets low on this Halloween
she decorates grave fit for a Queen,
then stares up into the darker sky...
many blessings on this Samhain Nigh.

Really captured the imagination.

I thought the rhythm and syntax in the first two lines was great; Shakespeare uses that same sort of rhythm and syntax in Macbeth within the speech of the three witches, ("When shall we three meet again; in thunder, lightning or in rain" etcetera) and, because it resembles the rhythm of an incantation, it really adds to the magic and mystery.

The Crone of old she Winter's well
as in the Forest she would dwell...

There was also a genuine air of melancholy within the poem and I really felt sympathy for the witch.
It was a good way of teaching people about Samhain
and its importance.

JoHn -

"Ex amore victoria". ("From love comes victory".)

I agree with wellwisher - some fantastic lines in this Jenny - well done

Hi JoHn,

thankyou so much for your wonderful long comment. I
always love to hear what you have to say, because it's so deep and meaningful and this comment was very special.

I really hope that people reading this, can pick up
on the true meaning of Samhain...because it's a
subject very dear to my heart.

Thankyou again for reading and commenting.

Happy Samhain.
Jenny.

Hi there insert,

It's very kind of you to read this poem and I really
do appreciate you leaving me a comment.

Hope you are having a good day, happy Samhain.

Happy Samhain.
Jenny.

And a very happy Samhain, to you, Jenny. The first of November tomorrow, and winter surely does start then. Hope you are keeping warm and cosy this Halloween night;-)

Very much enjoyed your poem, and the last stanza is truly magical;-)

Tina

Hi Tina,

I really do appreciate you reading this little tale
and leaving me such a nice comment, I'm glad you
enjoyed.

I had a wonderful evening celebrating Samhain, it is
my favourite festival of the year. I hope you had a
good Samhain too.

And here we are on the beginning of Winter like you
said, all those cosy evenings, I just love them.

Thankyou again for the magic comment Tina, always
appreciated.

Jenny.

new Skinner-jennifer
Thoroughly enjoyed magical
mystery poem. I feel the word's
intending more. Someone may lost someone.
Very cleverly written. Full of images mentioned.
Can I ask if Samhain means=Halloween?
Well mine wnet snooker,and done up 1o bags,
of toffee's, lot's squeals and screams, right
by the window of children, very youn so dark,
with an adult. Local park had a Halloween do.
None came this year, so mine can chew away toffees.
Glad you had a good time. Just had faithful in the
comfort cat black! I can see one coming.....
julie xx

Hi julie,

yes you're right Samhain is the festival name for
Halloween to all witches.

It's about a very old witch, who goes to her mother's
grave and weeps for her, because she misses her so
much. But then she decorates her grave and thanks the
spirits for what she has and what her mother gave her.

It looks like you had some evening last night,
personally I think you were in the best company, with
your beautiful cat.

Belated Happy Samhain wishes to you.

Jenny. xx

New Skinner_jennifer
Hi! So kind of you to explain.
As know someone lost mum, says
in a poem. Not sure who it was.
I quite often don't get poems, how I think,
turn it into soemthing else wrong?
But you have written this so well.
Laugh not our cat, 'Green Eyes' Jazz.
Oh! dear mentioned him again.
Well get scared fireworks, memories!
The noise once, went special place? so bad
found out witches coven, down in town.
Reckoned spooky. As not spiritual.
Take care.
julie xx

Catching up on a bit of reading and found this Jenny - really like it and agree with the others - well done. :-)

Hi there FB,

thankyou so much for reading this piece and leaving
such a kind comment.

Jenny.

Am glad it so important to other people Jenny :) K

Hi Kahdai,

it's good to hear from you again and pleased that
you read this piece and saw the importance of it.

Thankyou for reading and letting me know.

Jenny.

Hello Jenny,

I thought this was absolutely wonderful. Like Julie, I didn't know what Samhain meant but I loved the poem just the same. I always find your poems accessible so that is probably why I enjoy them so.

Moya

Good morning Moya,

what a wonderful compliment, I really appreciate
what you said about my poems being accessible.

Samhain is about thinking of loved ones that have
passed on. Also for me, it is more important than
Christmas as it's when Winter begins, as we look
forward to darker nights and time to think of the
things we have achieved and plan for next years
harvest, although I find it harder and harder the
older I get, to dig the garden to plant our veg,
I think I'm becoming the crone, he...he!

Sorry I'm rabbiting, but again, thankyou for
reading and leaving a comment.

Jenny.

Hii Jenny abpout time I got on a computer! Some year carve out pumkin or sweed and put candle in it Sowhin for me is also about my mama, my gran and greatgrans up to atleast greatx5 and what they did for a lives wer about nature and magic That is time for me to have emptied the veg patch exept for leeks, this year wehave a glasshouse with tomatoes and chillis!

Hi Kahdai,

it's so good to hear from you again, how are you?
I haven't actually done much in the garden this
year, but my partner has been really busy.

Having a greenhouse is such a bonus in this country,
being able to grow tomatoes and chillies is the best,
they are so expensive to buy, and when you grow
your own, you know where it comes from and the fact
that you grew it yourself, I think helps you enjoy
it more.

Thankyou for telling me all about yourself and I
hope you are enjoying the weather.

Jenny.

doesnt need to be expensive! you only need one chili or tomato fruit and take out the seeds and put them in a sandwitch bag in an airing cupboard or somewhere warm and dark for a few day or did you mean greenhouse you can make one out of builders pallets wood and use plastic bags or anything like that Ii even made a little pictures out of qualty street wrappers for on the door Now we finally have a metal frame with glass in and most of was free! I still prefer the wonky wooden handmade one for some silly soft sentimental reason! x K