IT'S IN HIS KISS ( I. P. )

Very passionate Jenny. A good one for the IP

;)Pia

Thankyou so much Pia,
glad you could see the
passion in this poem.

Thankyou for your kind words,
you know it's always appreciated.

Jenny.

I thought that you structured the poem very well so as to best convey the idea of passion building inside.

I really like the way that the last part of the poem climbs towards a climax.

passion builds at the
gentleness of his touch,
a fire building inside
rising like a Phoenix
from the ashes...
to that final explosion
as many fireworks
are released...
at the tenderness
of his kiss.

I thought that you structured the poem very well so as to best convey the idea of passion building inside.

I really like the way that the last part of the poem climbs towards a climax.

passion builds at the
gentleness of his touch,
a fire building inside
rising like a Phoenix
from the ashes...
to that final explosion
as many fireworks
are released...
at the tenderness
of his kiss.

new skinner_jennifer
Great one for the (IP)
stanza lines:
Rising like a phoenix
from the ashes...
to that explosion
as many fireworks
are released...
at the tenderness
of his kiss.
Strange I was only singing
indoors the "It's in his kiss".
Was it "The Supremes."

A good one Jenny

the ending is superb!

Hello well-wisher,

thankyou for reading, it's nice to know you thought
the structure of the piece was fine.

I always appreciate your comments, so thankyou for
letting me know.

Jenny.

Hi julie,

glad you enjoyed reading this piece, it's really kind
of you to let me know your thoughts.

That record you're on about, I've heard it before,
it's an old sixties song, but I have'nt got a clue
who it's by, perhaps someone else knows.

Anyway hope you're having a great bank holiday Monday, you take care, and thankyou for reading.

Jenny.

Hello seashore,

glad you liked this piece, thankyou also for letting
me know, it's much appreciated.

Hope you are having a
great bank holiday Monday.

Jenny.

Hi Maisie,

I'm so happy you liked the ending, I suppose it kind
of brings it all together. Thankyou for reading and
letting me know, always appreciated.

Have a great Bank Holiday Monday.

Jenny.

new skinner_jennifer
Sorry computer is playing up,
comment to you gone on three times.
Although deleted twice. Maybe better put my glasses on. Not gone out cold, yes, and you have good bank
holiday. He's gone bowls, I can concentrat more when
he isn't in, and t.v was on. Nuisance.So go from one room to another.
Cloudy. You take care, I have watched you come up the
ladder so brilliantly, with your poems. May I say
Ask Tina she will know the song I am sure. My time so
many.Another little gem for the (IP)
Oh! dear I am deleting them computer is nutty!
not deleting.
julie xx

That's okay julie, don't worry I understand, I have
had problems with my computer in the past, so I know
exactly where you're coming from. Also I know what
it's like when you're trying to read and there's
loads of noise going on in the background.

Thankyou for coming back to me with another great
comment.

Jenny.

I agree with Pia - Very passionate, Jenny!

As to the song, there are a few versions, Julie,
Cher’s is good bit I reckon this is the best -
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dV4aywItsKI

Thankyou for your kind comment Mangone.
Also how could I have forgotton that wonderful
version by the amazing Cher. Thanks for clearing
that up, even though I know it's not the original.

Thankyou again for reading and commenting.

Jenny.

Have you noticed the 'Love Has Gone' post by Pinda, Jenny? Unexpected...

Mangone- Pinda's record company and friends are posting some of the things he left behind.

;)Pia

Really enjoying your poetry Jenny. :-)

Hi Mangone,

No I didn't notice it had gone, I do know like Pia
said, that his record label are posting his work.
But that is very strange.

Thanks for coming back to me.

Jenny.

Hello fb,

Thankyou for letting me know you're reading and
enjoying my poetry, it's much appreciated.

Hope you are now over the worst of your work load
and able to relax a bit.

Take care.

Jenny.

Like the others I though this was a great poem. Like the building of pace in line with the building passion. Hope your well Jenny

V.C

P.S What does I.P stand for - know I will kick myself when you tell me but its driving me mad- can't work it out

Hi there V.C.

First I'd like to say thankyou so much for reading
this poem and letting me know your thoughts. It was
really nice to hear from you. I'm well, hope you are
too.

I.P. stands for Inspiration point. Each week Tony
gives you a subject or idea for a story, or poem,
or whatever you want to write, just to, as he would
say, 'get your taste buds going.'

Don't worry about not knowing, I didn't even know
what a cherry was for, when I first came on here,
I just thought it was a pretty picture in the corner
of the writing.

Hope that's helped, Oh! you normally get the I.P.
come up in the New forum topics, on the right hand
side.

Thanks again for your kind comment.

Jenny.

Ahh, Jen

"...as many fireworks are released..."

I'm off to buy a box of squibs.

Hi Jennifer, you are definitely on fire this week. this is sizzlingly good.

Hi there again ScoZen,

you could send some rockets up for me please!

Thanks for your message, you make me laugh!

Jenny.

.

.

Hi there oldpesky,

thanks for your sizzling great comment, it was red
hot!

Hope you're having a great week.

Jenny.

Beautiful, passionate and gently alluring, this one, Jenny! One of my favourites of yours for sure - this poem is a kiss to the senses all in itself, I loved it :)

Rachel xx

Hello Rachel,

good to hear from you, hope you are having a good
week.

I really love that comment, 'a kiss to the senses,'
really beautiful.

Thankyou for reading and thankyou for letting me
know, it's always appreciated.

Jenny.xx

Hi julie,

glad to hear the sun's out where you are, it's out
here as well, infact it's been a perfect day.

As I said don't worry about the computer, I'm sure
it happens to all of us at times.

Keep smiling and the sunshine will shine down on you.

All the best,

Jenny.

So sorry about getting to this one late, Jenny and I have more episodes of your story to catch up on too, and I promise I will, tomorrow at the latest.

I think Rachel sums up this lovely poem so very aptly when she says 'it is a kiss to the senses'.

Really beautiful, this one;-)

Tina

new skinner_jennifer
Ah! mine had go deleting trebles
comment tou you repeating taught me,
if delete then put a dot, then post comment button goes, but leaves name and space?
Computer was very sluggish yesterday like me
Sun is out. ok you to
you asked about Pinda's work, click
onto tutle on right here, then keep going
backwards on the numbers your find some..
julie xx

Hi Tina,

firstly I'd like to say, please don't worry about
not commenting on my work, you've been ill and it
can make you feel tired and less able to spend time
going through all the pieces of work on here. I
completely understand.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading this poem, it's nice
to know that, and I really do appreciate your comment.

Hope you feel completely better soon.

Jenny.

Thankyou for your advice julie,
much appreciated.

Jenny.

great description of what it feels like inside :-)

Hi shannan,

glad you could understand the passion in this poem.

Thankyou so much for your comment and letting me
know, always appreciated.

Jenny.