A sheet of memories I took with me that day
the sweet scent of patchouli,
its fragrance still lingers
caressing my senses,
time enough for me
drifting on that quiet lake,
as I lay under a cloudless sky
silence slipping into silence,
soft white feathers take flight,
I watched as two white swans
flew overhead... their necks
so lithe and proud,
sun beams dancing on golden lake
ripple like glistening jewels,
as gently I float away
drifting into gentle slumber.
Comments
seashore | April 14, 2011 - 08:02
Very visual and gentle - lovely.
Just noticed a typo in title, Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | April 14, 2011 - 08:10
Hi seashore,
phew! thankyou so much for letting me know about
that mistake.
Also thankyou for your kind comment, much appreciated.
Jenny.
insertponceyfre... | April 14, 2011 - 08:56
seashore has got it just right - visual and gentle - you take the reader floating on that lake with you. I really enjoyed this jenny
Silver Spun Sand | April 14, 2011 - 10:21
I have nearly gone blissfully to sleep whilst reading this Jenny...so soothing it is;-)
I love the imagery of sunbeams dancing on a golden lake.
Much enjoyed.
Tina
skinner_jennifer | April 14, 2011 - 10:25
Hi Insert,
thankyou for the great comment, glad I could take
you floating on the lake with me.
Thankyou for reading.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | April 14, 2011 - 10:29
Hi Tina,
that's a wonderful way to read this poem. I'm glad
that it gave you that meditative state of mind.
You know your comments are always appreciated.
Thankyou for reading.
Jenny.
SundaysChild | April 14, 2011 - 13:08
Beautiful
skinner_jennifer | April 14, 2011 - 15:49
Thankyou so much for reading SundaysChild, also for
your nice comment, much appreciated.
Jenny.
Highhat | April 14, 2011 - 16:39
It's all been said Jenny. I really enjoyed this serene quietude
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | April 14, 2011 - 17:02
Thankyou so much Pia, I'm glad that you could feel
that serene feeling.
Hope you are well.
Jenny.
Richard L. Prov... | April 17, 2011 - 00:07
Soft and sensuous, a cloud of restfulness and great imagery. Writing a short poem like this with a blend of the outdoors and contemporary thinking is a challenge; a great job. Richard LP
skinner_jennifer | April 17, 2011 - 13:11
Hello Richard,
that is a very special compliment, it has really
made my day.
Thankyou so much for reading and for the beautiful
words.
Jenny.
sue dinum | April 17, 2011 - 22:47
Hi Jenny, I didn't catch this until late on and I'm glad I did. Really nice poem and I know I've said it a few times recently about your work, but at the risk of being repetitive and boring, you are getting better and better the more you write and that is as it should be. Perhaps your writing is like a good wine - maturing with age.
sue
skinner_jennifer | April 18, 2011 - 09:30
Hi sue,
thankyou for those kind words, they are much appreciated, glad you enjoyed this poem.
Jenny.
fatboy74 | April 28, 2011 - 20:08
Jenny, this is just beautiful - probably my favourite poem of yours. :-)
skinner_jennifer | May 2, 2011 - 09:00
Hi fatboy,
my what a compliment, I'm very glad you liked this
one so much.
Thankyou.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | May 2, 2011 - 09:02
Wow! Thankyou so much cherry pickers for the cherries, It was such a nice surprise to come back
to, after being away so long.
Thankyou again, I'm glad you liked the poem.
Jenny.