Oh! the joy of being young,
of chasing dreams in songs we sung,
I danced sky-clad till day is done,
my naked body in the sun,
now the leaves toss about in a dance,
I move with them as if in a trance,
with fear in my heart and trembling hands,
I wonder what's happened to our lands,
why do I see day after day,
people's dreams taken away,
struggling hard to make their way,
in a world where evil seems to pay?
I want to feel the wind in my face,
see leaves tossed all over the place,
where every creed, colour and race,
can transform this earth with a touch of faith.
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | February 9, 2011 - 17:05
This is beautiful, Jenny, with some really effective imagery.
'I danced sky-clad till day is done'.
A lovely line.
Much enjoyed.
Tina
ScoZen | February 9, 2011 - 17:29
Hello skinnerJ.
Agree with Sand lady.
I liked...
"...where every creed, colour and race,
can transform this earth with a touch of faith..."
Will keep fingers crossed and wish for that.
Kind regards
fatboy74 | February 9, 2011 - 20:37
Oh! the joy of being young,
of chasing dreams in songs we sung,
I danced sky-clad till day is done,
my naked body in the sun,
The land of lost content Jenny! - love this opening and enyoyed the poem as a whole. Really well done. :-)
Highhat | February 10, 2011 - 05:39
Yes I agree with the others.A great poem with a lot of belief and hope. I hope that our faith can see us through too.
;)Pia
seashore | February 10, 2011 - 09:16
Very nice, Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 10, 2011 - 10:15
Hi Tina,
I'm glad that the imagery caught your attention, it
was what I was trying to convey.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem, thankyou so much
for reading and for your lovely comment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 10, 2011 - 10:18
Hi ScoZen,
yes I shall cross fingers, toes and whatever else
I can cross that we can transform this earth.
Thankyou so much for reading and commenting.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 10, 2011 - 10:27
Hi FB,
I really do appreciate your kind words, it's strange
but you can dance sky-clad when your young without
feeling any inhibitions, I know I did, especially at
festivals, but now I wouldn't be seen dead dancing
in front of complete strangers. How times change.
Thankyou for reading and commenting.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 10, 2011 - 10:31
Hi Pia,
what a great thing, if everyone could put their
thoughts together and really hope strongly enough
to transform this earth, what do they call it?
mind control. It's alright Pia I'm just dreaming
again.
Thankyou for reading and commenting, you know I
always appreciate your comments.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | February 10, 2011 - 10:34
Hi seashore,
I'm glad you liked this poem coral, I've been
calling you seashore, but realised that others call
you coral, hope you don't mind me calling you coral.
Thankyou very much for reading and commenting.
Jenny.
apeljo | February 11, 2011 - 12:16
Jenny, I love this! It has a unique quality of making a statement about negativity in an upbeat and positive way, it sucks you in!
skinner_jennifer | February 11, 2011 - 15:20
Hi apeljo,
good to hear from you again. What a wonderful
compliment, thankyou so much for your feedback,
it's always welcome.
Jenny.