There was a violent explosion,
the earth began to quake and shiver.
Fire raged across the earth,
the core erupted,
It sucked the vital life from the surface.
Gases released putrid, unearthly smells,
the chaos of time searching for its kill.
A red mist formed like a blanket,
across the vast expanse of sky,
a glow that made it seem like hell.
The brutish beast enveloping the earth,
the waters turning to sludge,
dirty sediment congealing,
like an oily liquid,
to kill all of life.
And yet from all this chaos came new life,
a life that could resist antagonism,
this state of hostile conflict.
Though the old life had died,
so a new life was created.
Comments
Louise178 | October 14, 2010 - 15:59
This is wonderfully descriptive Jenny. I love the catchy ending, rounds it off really well, you could get very passionate when reading this, I did, because it's so descriptive, you can put lots of menace in to it as you read it. :)
skinner_jennifer | October 14, 2010 - 16:52
Hi Louise178,
I am truely thankful for your wonderful comment,
I was so pleased you could see where I was going
with this poem. Thankyou again.
Jenny.
Highhat | October 14, 2010 - 18:40
I like the way we can expect a lot of beauty after the eruption and new birth. wonderful poem Jenny.
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | October 14, 2010 - 18:50
Thankyou Pia,
I decided to go somewhere else when I wrote this,
not normally the type of thing I write, but I am
glad I did.
Jenny.
TREVOR MAYTUM | October 14, 2010 - 20:27
Hey, Jenny, this is very deep and moving, quite different to what I'm used from you, Very good, and very thought provoking too. Well done!
Trev
Highhat | October 15, 2010 - 05:08
It's dramatic and there are some good metaphors: "A life that could resist antagonism" fantastic!
skinner_jennifer | October 15, 2010 - 07:23
Hi Trev,
Thankyou so much for your kind words, it's so strange, sometimes things come into my head so
unexpected, then I just have to get them down.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | October 15, 2010 - 07:25
Hi Pia,
believe it or not I was in a real good mood when I
wrote this piece, it's so strange isn't it?
Thanks for reading.
Jenny.
Larkin Williamson | October 15, 2010 - 22:31
Wonderfully written...I could picture it in my mind and the end was perfect. :)
MistakenMagic | October 16, 2010 - 08:26
Love that second stanza, Jenny - gorgeously gritty! Well done :)
Magic xxx
skinner_jennifer | October 16, 2010 - 13:24
Hello Larkin Williamson,
So glad you could see the fact that out of every
dissaster comes something good. Cheers for your
comment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | October 16, 2010 - 13:27
Hello Magic,
Thankyou so much for your comments, it's really
appreciated.
Jenny. xxx
skinner_jennifer | October 20, 2010 - 08:56
Thanks blighters rock, you write an interesting
comment, glad you liked the poem.
Jenny.
well-wisher | October 28, 2010 - 10:30
I liked the drama and the description in this poem and the choice of 'Free Verse' suited the subject matter. I also like how the poem begins with an explosion, that grabbed my attention.
skinner_jennifer | October 29, 2010 - 16:01
Hi well-wisher,
I am very glad that I could grab your attention.
It makes it all worth while, when you know someone
has enjoyed reading your work, I sure you would
agree.
Thanks again for the great comment.
Jenny.
RachelPatricia | October 30, 2010 - 13:43
Brilliant poem, Jenny. Death and destruction, hope and promise - you've captured the essence of each so well in this, was a joy to read and the explosion caught my attention too :)
Very much enjoyed,
Rachel xx
skinner_jennifer | November 1, 2010 - 18:47
Thanks so much Rachel,
I really do believe that it doesn't matter what
happens, life needs to exist in one form or another.
Your words mean a lot to me, thankyou.
Jenny. xx