Shimmering through the corridors,
the maiden moves frigidly into the great hall,
In her hand, she holds a sword,
its hilt diamond encrusted with rubies.
Stalactites hang from the great entablature,
the great columns stand,
like frozen giant guards,
that rise into the night sky,
as the maiden makes ready for battle.
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | January 12, 2011 - 16:04
Hi there, Jennifer. I like this very much;-)
Just one tiny typo, fourth line. Should be 'its' without the apostrophe.
Love your choice of vocabulary, especially:-
"Stalactites hang from the great entablature,
the great columns stand,
like frozen giant guards..."
Great stuff!
Tina
skinner_jennifer | January 12, 2011 - 16:29
Hi Tina,
thankyou so much for telling me about the spelling,
when I wrote it, I meant to change it, forgot it
totally slipped my mind. Thanks again, I will
change straight away.
Glad you enjoyed this one.
Jenny.
Highhat | January 12, 2011 - 16:36
So descriptive Jenny. I like it immensely.
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | January 12, 2011 - 16:42
Thankyou Pia,
really glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the comment.
Jenny.
Deepanker Saxena | January 15, 2011 - 14:37
hey..
i mst appreciate ypur vocabulary...
truly awesome selection of words....
Deepanker
skinner_jennifer | January 15, 2011 - 19:42
Hi Deepanker,
What an amazing compliment, thankyou so much, it's
really appreciated.
Jenny.
Cavalcaderl | January 16, 2011 - 00:19
new skinner_jennifer
Hi! jenny beautiful yes
big words,sometimes I use
a dictionary now to check spelling
or find new one.I'll have to look these
up so I know.The images and colours good.
julie xx
skinner_jennifer | January 16, 2011 - 13:26
Hi julie,
thanks for your feedback, it's so much
appreciated, hope you find the words in
the dictionary okay.
Thankyou for reading.
Jenny.
Deepanker Saxena | January 16, 2011 - 14:28
hey...its totaly my pleasure..
n m new here so uploading poems of mine
it would be great if you check out and comment..
skinner_jennifer | January 17, 2011 - 16:06
Thanks for getting back, it's good to read others
work, puts everything in perspective, so I will
certainly read your stuff and comment.
Jenny.