To You I give My Love * A Little One to Shine

Oh I remember when my children were newborn- lovely- where does the title come from- ? A song? I'll have to read it again to fully understand , I think!
;)Pia

Oh yes it is beautiful-. as only a mother can express it- thank you for a wonderful read Jenny-

(maybe you should leave out 'small'- and just write 'little mite'?)

Hi Pia,

totally agree with you about taking out the 'small,'
so have made the change, I think it looks a lot
better. Thankyou.

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, I really got a lot
of pleasure out of writing it.

Thankyou for reading and commenting. Hope you are
having a good Sunday.

Jenny.

Very emmotive and lots of great imagery. I also felt
the rhythm moved me onwards and upwards. Uplifting.

There's an intense passion behind the words:

the heart beats echo...
waves drift in and out
relentless and free are
coming like whispers on
a soft gentle breeze...

and

finding those hands
squeezing so tight
shouting with gusto
rhythms take flight,

JoHn

Hello John,

I'm glad you picked up on the passion, I think that
having a baby can produce so many different feelings
for a woman, almost like a recipe of ingredients
thrown together, producing so much emotion, it's
hard to describe, but I did try with this poem.

Having been through childbirth myself, I tried to
pick up on those feelings.

I really do appreciate you reading and leaving a
comment. I hope you are having a peaceful Sunday.

Jenny.

Ah, Jenny - there is nothing quite as magical as a newborn baby, is there? Especially when it's your own - I miss the smell, to be honest - babies have a certain smell, don't they? I used to spend hours sticking my nose to their fluffy little scalps and breathing it in, this poem brought it all back for me, so beautifully put and I bet you're a fantastic mother, if this poem alone is anything to go by :)

Brilliant, I love it, and definitely one of my favourites of yours :)

Rachel xx

Dear Rachel,

thankyou so much for reading this piece. I have to
admit to agreeing with you about babies, yes they
do have a special little smell. I remember just
after having my son and holding him, I really didn't
want to let him go, I just lay there, looking and
talking to him, telling him about his bedroom and
all the walks I would take him on, its just one of
those things I suppose every mother does.

Anyway Rachel again thankyou for reading and the
great comment.

Have a great week, hope things don't get to hectic
with your little ones.

Jenny.

Hello Jenny,

If I didn't know who had written this I think I would have guessed. It reflects your personality absolutely and your poetic voice comes through very strongly.

Much enjoyed.

Moya

Good morning Moya,

thankyou so much for your kind words, they are
always so encouraging and I always appreciate
what you have to say.

Hope you are well. Don't forget to keep writing
your wonderful stories, they always put a smile
on my face, making my day.

Thanks again.

Jenny.