"Is she finished?" Claire asked.
"Yes. Here is your certificate of authenticity," the scientist looked into Claire's eyes.
Claire looked at the certificate for a while. She had named her Sarah Albright. She felt as though she just had a baby.
"Your clone, Sarah, has grown up in a highly specialized environment. The only humans she has known are us scientists. As you requested, she read mainly US, Vogue, Vanity Fair, and People magazines. Although you came once a week to converse with her for a few hours, she is still not quite comfortable with you.
She knows English almost perfectly and is a profiscient swimmer. We have also, as you requested, attached a tracking device deep in her ear.
Do you have any questions?"
"No. I want to see her."
"Sarah."
She stepped into the room. Claire felt like she was looking at her double.
"Claire. I missed you."
"Sarah, today you are going home."
"The scientists told me this day would come. I would love to live with you."
Claire started to tear up. She felt her heart pumping.
Comments
eternaldream24 | December 13, 2011 - 21:08
"Yes. Here is your certificate of authenticity," the scientist handed her the certificate. (We know the scientist handed her the certificate so you don't need to say it twice. I would maybe change this to something like... The scientist nods, "Here is your certificate of authenticity."
She felt as though she just had a baby. Add more detail here...is she happy, scared?
Do you have any more question?" (questions)
This story definitley has potential. It just needs a little more detail. Keep at it!
Steve | December 20, 2011 - 04:28
Thanks for your suggestions. Quite appreciated.