Entwined

Simple, direct and clever. You are fast becoming the master (mistress) of the short piece. Have checked out your other work and it is superb. You have a great talent for saying a hell of a lot in relatively few words - not always an easy thing to do. Loving your work and look forward to more.

Chris ;)

Another little beauty!

Sundayschild is one of very few poet I understand,gotta hand it to you,you brilliant with words

Reading through ya other work,looked at some comments an saw some Italian,do you speak an write Italian aswell?

Another little spark! Direct and perfect for it ;)

Magic xxx

Here, with sparse observation,
you risk exasperation;
this glorious economy of phrasing
could make longer work more blazing.

Go on, serve us up a main-course; your amuse bouche are tasty, but make me hunger for more.

Ewan.

threeleafshamrock- thanks so much for your lovely comment.
I am really touched. I have not written poetry for a while- and am just experimenting, really- so to hear this positive feedback is truly encouraging.

Thanks so much, sarah!

Thanks pinda, I really appreciate your words :)
Re Italian: I can write the odd thing, but only basic stuff- I can speak it to a fairly comfortable degree (self taught- not studied); it improves when I am in the country itself.

Thank you Magic- I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

Point taken, Ewan :p

Hey, no offence! I like what you're doing. Multum in parvo. I'd just love to see this economy stretched over a longer piece that's all.

Regards
Ewan

No offence was taken, Ewan- quite the opposite.
I hear what you are saying.

Poems are something I am enjoying experimenting with again- it's been a while.
I have ideas for stories, but they are short, as that is my preferred style.
I hope you will keep me posted with what you think- positive and negative.
I value your comments as I sense you speak your mind and I like that.
Thanks for the feedback, I really do appreciate it.