so this is love;
you beside me
not looking a day over nineteen
and yet,
it's been nearly a decade
since we were that young
i can smell the medicine
on your breath-
like oranges,
but not as sweet,
and i shut my eyes
so the tears don't fall
dawn is breaking
and we are quiet;
you hold me tight
knowing
i'm anxious about today,
anxious about tomorrow
it's just the way it is
now;
i have my demons
and you have yours-
i run my fingers
down your spine
watch you shiver
feel you shiver
our youth is slipping away-
too many
bitter days and bitter pills...
the fear and the panic
grips me, silently;
threatens
to pull me down
pull me away
and i try to save myself,
but
somehow
you get there first
your lips meet mine,
soft and effortless.
behind you the daylight
spreads
brighter, kinder;
like hope
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | January 12, 2011 - 18:25
This is so beautiful, SundaysChild.
Tina;-)
Highhat | January 12, 2011 - 19:57
I agree with Tina
;)Pia
SundaysChild | January 12, 2011 - 20:00
Thank you both, much appreciated xx
Beeme | January 13, 2011 - 11:08
I agree with the above, a beautiful and original love poem. I really, really enjoyed.
Beeme xx
insertponceyfre... | January 13, 2011 - 19:43
a finely drawn picture with many layers - beautiful
SundaysChild | January 13, 2011 - 20:39
Thank you very much Beeme. I'm glad you enjoyed this xx
SundaysChild | January 13, 2011 - 20:40
Thanks insert for your kind comment xx
SundaysChild | January 13, 2011 - 20:41
Thank you abctales for the cherry xx
fatboy74 | January 13, 2011 - 23:27
Yes a great picture drawn here and the final stanza is just beautiful - a real triumph Sundays child, well done! :-)
seashore | January 14, 2011 - 09:03
Lovely poem.
luigi_pagano | January 14, 2011 - 12:20
"so this is love;
you beside me
not looking a day over nineteen
and yet,
it's been nearly a decade
since we were that young"
A nice opening stanza to a romantic poem, dear SC, as sweet as the cherries that accompany it.
Luigi x
MistakenMagic | January 14, 2011 - 13:31
Love the last lines, Sunday! A beautiful, beautiful poem. We all need a bit of hope ;) Well done on the cherry!
Magic xxx
SundaysChild | January 14, 2011 - 19:51
I'm quite overwhelmed! Thank you all for the lovely comments xx
Cavalcaderl | January 18, 2011 - 17:10
new SundaysChild
Beautiful from beginning to end.
Well deserved cherry!
julie xx