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Posted by SundaysChild on May 7, 2009 - 19:18
from the ABC set Life is Bittersweet

As I watched her there,
Standing on the horizon,
I felt that something was about to leave me.
A vision of myself in youth was about to take wing,
And the solitude inside of me was vast.

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Silver Spun Sand | May 7, 2009 - 22:51

This I found totally breathtaking.

Tina

SundaysChild | May 7, 2009 - 23:11

Many thanks, glad you liked it.

Dynamaso | May 8, 2009 - 06:46

I've gone back and read a number of your poems now. You do these very short pieces very well indeed. This one is particularly good.

Nathan Bednarek | May 8, 2009 - 12:33

Yes, I agree. This one's especially good. Well done.

Nathan.

MistakenMagic | May 8, 2009 - 14:05

First of all, well done on the cherry! Oh and story of the week ;)

I love this, so very effective! Brilliant!

Magic xxx

SundaysChild | May 8, 2009 - 14:31

Thanks for the positive feedback! :)

Jasper_Milvain | May 9, 2009 - 21:36

This is terific! The last line moves from good to excellent. Look forward to more.

Thanks.
JM.

SundaysChild | May 10, 2009 - 16:23

Many thanks, JM.
Glad you liked it :)

threeleafshamrock | May 17, 2009 - 10:27

My daughters' 18th birthday party last night. I get up this morning and read this - just seemed so perfect. Lovely piece and the cherry was a given.

Chris ;)

White Dwarf | November 19, 2010 - 05:58

Effective