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Posted by SundaysChild on February 11, 2010 - 03:17
from the ABC set Life is Bittersweet

The fog of apathy
cripples our potential,
and stunts us.
I equip myself with weapons,
of flesh and mind,
I saw them in my nightmares
and, convinced, I gave consent.
In the darkness of this room,
you kiss- as far inside me as
you can get, and I watch your face;
your eyes reach out to me, lock,
shoot and claim.
My thoughts are weary, too much
vision in the wrong surroundings.
Shadows creep the walls, and mock my journey;
parasites, I have no need for them,
they witness nothing, they are unknown.
I stifle my sighs, wrap my legs tighter
around you and surrender.

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Comments

jennifer | February 11, 2010 - 21:44

Some great imagery here,

J x

MistakenMagic | February 13, 2010 - 13:31

Gritty, dark but nonetheless so beautifully said! Love these lines:

'My thoughts are weary, too much
vision in the wrong surroundings.
Shadows creep the walls, and mock my journey;
parasites, I have no need for them,
they witness nothing, they are unknown.'

Magic xxx

Curse of 222 | February 13, 2010 - 15:02

damn it, i was going to go with gritty and dark, but beautiful...however magic got it in first! "too much
vision in the wrong surroundings." is a stand-out phrase.
powerful stuff.

jason

SundaysChild | February 17, 2010 - 19:22

thank you very much for the comments- it was going round and round my mind for ages and just had to tidy it up a little and then post it.
have hardly been on abctales at all at the moment- life is well and truly getting in the way of most things at present :(