It was the smell of you as
you brushed my cheek
with your lips, fresh showered and
I was still drowsy
It was the smell of you
as you came to my bed
smoke still in your hair and
I was half waking
It was the smell of you
as you wrapped your legs
around mine in your sleep and
staked your claim
It is the smell of you
that lingers
Comments
DraxB | May 27, 2009 - 13:53
Short, simple and quite charming. (Hope that doesn't sound like an insult).
sunshine | May 27, 2009 - 15:52
Many thanks - I'm not insulted at all. I think 'charm' is much maligned, as is 'nice'.
Bradene | May 27, 2009 - 15:54
This creates a lovely little cameo in ones mind. Simple and beautiful. Val
sunshine | May 28, 2009 - 09:21
thank you Val. Simple appears to be what I usually end up with, no matter what my starting point is or what route I take!
Bradene | May 28, 2009 - 09:57
Simple is good, esecially if what it has to say is memorable and stays with the reader long after it has been read. This does. Believe it. (-; Val x
Silver Spun Sand | May 29, 2009 - 10:58
Marvellous work! Many congrats on the well-deserved cherry.
Tina
Dynamaso | June 2, 2009 - 01:14
Simple and nice and very well done.
sunshine | June 2, 2009 - 07:03
Tina/Mark : Thanks very much for passing by and commenting. Am pleased you appreciate the simplicity. Margot