Blackbird Rapper

Lol I'm suprised to say I liked that piece of writing,damn what an idea for a piece of writing.I was addicted to read on and on man,lol kept me wanting to see what that rude boi started chattin ya getz me. Lol,that was entertaining dude,lol reminded me of my cousin(a rude yet wannabe lol)

Liked this piece because it also potrayed real life situations.

"Dude, why’s you lookin so uncool
You tink you rappin wit a fool?
I earned my wings man; tha’s a fac’
You tink I’m dumb jus’ cos I’m black?
You know what I’m sayin’?’"

That was a good verse because it connoting that most rappers are Black.Most stereotyped to be dumb but yet they stereotype themselfs sometimes by saying "Is it casue I'm Black".As an African American I was glad you put that verse in and wasn't offended in anyway(Plus I'm a rapper).

Liked the way in the first verse it seems like it's going to be nice and wonderful scenery then the rude boi comes along.

Great work man!

P.s. funny how you're turning towards a rap type of poem,and I'm turning to poetry.Don't know if you've seen Beemes piece Love hurts,it's a rap.

Raps the new trend,ya getz me :)

What works so well for me here is the contrast of voices; the slightly (pompous?) poetical narrator with that of the rapping blackbird.

Pinda's comment must have been cheering to read. Real high quality rapping has displayed a mastery of rhyme most aspiring (please note, self included) poets on here can never hope to attain. This goes all the way back to the days of the Sugar Hill Gang and The Furious Five.

Well done 3Leaf

Ewan

PS... hey Pinda Rap's not that new.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BN9-K0aZXRg

Chris, you have surpassed yourself with this one - I think it's the best you've ever written! I might have to beg you to let me use it in a class - the kids would love it! I also love the contrast of the voices and the attitude of the blackbird fits so well with their boldness!

J x

p.s. Love it! Can't stop re-reading it!

What can I say, Chris, except, "Ha, ha... hee hee!"

Just brilliant! You know what I'm sayin'? ;-)

Tina xx

Safe bro! I loved the this - it made me laugh and I too like the pomposity of the narrator. Great stuff innit
Sarah x

Well deserved Cherry.

You got somethjin against cuckooz??/

Hey Pinda, SO glad that you liked this 'half rap' lol. Was going to dedicate it to you anyway as you suggested doing something 'American' but was afraid you might be offended by it. Thanks for your kind words; it means a hell of lot coming from you.
Keep this up and your gonna have the whole of ABCtales rapping; You know what I’m sayin’?’ ;) Peace!

Chris ;)

Thanks Ewan ;) Made the narrator a bit of a pompous toff purposely to accentuate the difference. To be honest, I was not so sure that it had really worked but it seems to have struck a chord.
Just illustrates the advantage producing work on a site like this because it is so hard gain an analytical balance when reviewing our own work.

Thanks for the feed back; appreciated. ;-)

Jen, you should be my psychologist; 'the best thing you've ever written' ...Wow!! As for 'Can I use it in class?'...Does Dolly Parton sleep on her back? Of course you can but please give me the feedback, I would be interested to hear what they think ;).

Chris XX ;)

P.S. Feel free to read it as often as you like, I won't mind at all LOL.

Thanks Lovely Tina, blown away by the reviews of this one; REALLY (and we're talking totally here) unexpected, glad so many people got a kick out of it ;) but especially Pinda; that was important to me. Thanks again XXX

Hey Sarah, what's the Jackanory LOL. Glad you was likin' this innit; respect girl, u no watt I's sayin'?

Chris XXX

Hahaha! No chuck, nothin against cuckoos'; married someone who is related ...well she would have to be lol. Thanks!

I started reading this piece and hadn't looked at who posted it but by just about the third verse I knew it was you :D Your humour is clearly greatly appreciated :) x

Loved this Chris, and I'm loving this blackbird - he should figure on more of your pieces ;) Well done on the cherry!

Magic xxx

Hi Amna, Thanks a lot. When I was born, I'm told the doctor said 'There is something funny about this one.' I like to think that he meant it in a humorous way lol. XX

Thanks Magic; I'm trying to think of ways to incorporate this blackbird into every piece from now on lol. XX

This reads like a very unlikely conversation between Shakespeare and Soulja Boy... ;-p

'I’ll hit the sky cos I ain’t dead
and pop a crap down on yo’ head.'

I burst out laughing on this one! The play on words is just so clever. Amazing work.

I honestly think you'd make a career for yourself as a stand-up comedian ;-D

Again, amazing, hilarious and quite an educational piece as well! A well deserved cherry! I'd give you a whole bunch of them if it were up to me! ;-)

Nathan.

Thanks a lot Nathan, the wife reckons I would want to start making a career out of something soon lol. I'll settle for the one VERY unexpected cherry; thanks for reading and your support ;)