Wipe Out

Posted by threeleafshamrock on June 23, 2009 - 09:51
from the ABC set shamrock's ramblings

Mangled wreckage,
like mating beetles.
The only creation;
loss!

More young blood;
eighteen!
To old to be young?
To young to die!

A man unto himself,
a boy unto us,
a son unto them,
a statistic unto the rest.

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Comments

Short but very effective Chris, I love the fast past created and the repetition works really well in the final stanza!

Magic xxx

Thanks lovely Magic ;) It was for a young man killed in a car crash 2 weeks ago.

Yeah, the beat of this short piece is very effective. I really enjoyed reading this, well done.

Nathan ;-)

Thanks Nathan ;)