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Thoughts of Old Lovers

Posted by threeleafshamrock on September 22, 2009 - 13:23
from the ABC set Lurve Ramblings

I laugh, it laps, I linger
By the lake
Memories wash over me
And I take
Sustenance from cool waters
For the sake
Of lovers long lost and past
In the wake
Of torrid, youthful ventures
That still snake
In between the crevices
And so shake
The foundations of the mind

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MistakenMagic | September 22, 2009 - 15:15

'That still snake
In between the crevices
And so shake
The foundations of the mind'

- love the final few lines, Chris! Well done ;)

Magic xxx

threeleafshamrock | September 22, 2009 - 15:33

Thanks Magic..this was before I started suffering from 'Oldtimers' ;) XXXX

chuck | September 22, 2009 - 18:02

You really know how to ramble threeleaf.

Cavalcaderl | September 22, 2009 - 19:18

New threeleafshamble
love lines:same as Mistakenmagic.
Youthful ventures
That still snake
in between the crevices
and so shake the foundations
of the mind?

threeleafshamrock | September 22, 2009 - 20:39

I know chuck, it's great and most of the time I don't even know I'm doing it...err, where was I? Where am I?

threeleafshamrock | September 22, 2009 - 20:41

Thanks Julie ;)xx

Curse of 222 | September 22, 2009 - 21:22

i really like this one, 3leaf. it's emotive and rhythmic...you know, for someone with "oldtimers".

jason

threeleafshamrock | September 22, 2009 - 21:27

Lol, thanks Jason ;)

Nathan Bednarek | September 22, 2009 - 21:39

Another brilliant poem Chris! Short = very effective. The structure is perfect for this poem and the tone comes through effortlessly. The last line is a spit'n'polish finish. Well done.

Nathan.

littlebit59 | September 23, 2009 - 13:48

Very nice, Chris. Short and bittersweet hits the spot with me, too.
jeanne

threeleafshamrock | September 23, 2009 - 16:10

Thanks Nathan and Jeanne, glad you liked ;)