Still no change,
His thinking mind remains the same,
This God inside is lazy with pride,
He's soon to learn,
That he no longer commands,
The powers of the nine,
Nothing but a grain of sand,
In the immortal time line.
Half an hour passes while he waits.
Distant shores an obvious start,
If you want to live the life of a,
Distant star,
It all started when the ship capsized,
We were looking for life jackets,
He had one,
She had one,
But there was none in my size,
Still though,
We prevail,
We together form a race,
That will never fail,
As to a purpose,
well,
It seems its a secret,
If you or your mother works it out,
Be sure to keep it!!
Hush!!
Then confusion, surrounded the mind.
Are,
Who,
Is,
You,
Going,
To,
Be.
My Biatch?
Be his girl then,
Makes more sense,
I'm a murderous bastard,
evaded of,
What is it they say?
Common sense.
And the list goes on.....
Comments
Highhat | May 9, 2011 - 16:20
You may want to change the capitals at the start of every line
and Brighton with a capital B
a lot between the lines but good
;)Pia
WillSimpson | May 9, 2011 - 18:21
Haha, i know my gramma is shit, but rules are for fools
fatboy74 | May 10, 2011 - 08:43
I like very much 'distant shores an obvious start' along with some other stand out lines - it needs an edit if you can be arsed; I rarely can be. ATB :-)
WillSimpson | May 10, 2011 - 11:24
Same here funboy, if there was a call for it to be edited then so be it, but until my collections are put down in print I won't bother. Thanks for your comments, x
Kahdai | July 30, 2011 - 17:15
makes sense anyway more than for my spelling!