When Candles of Wax my Room do Light
By Alfie Shoyger
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When candles of wax my room do light,
I down sit and some poetry write,
and though the centuries late have got,
I the verb at the end of each sentence put.
Please this as poetic licence view,
because if I not do this do,
I will not able to rhyme be.
If you should this as silly see,
I you to Shakespeare remember ask.
He also in late-verbed lines did bask.
Don’t try to me from doing it ban.
If the bard it did, then I too can.
I where my Muse does lead do go.
I’m a poet and you it don’t know!
© Alfie Shoyger
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I like this, it's something I
I like this, it's something I wish I'd thought of myself. Very original, well for me anyway.
Jenny.
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I hadn't even noticed! Talk
I hadn't even noticed! Talk about unobservant!!! But, Alfie, don't you find it sounds sort of swingy with the verb at the end? Even when you do it on purpose to be daft like this, it is sort of musical?
And Yoda as Bard also, never occured to me. Thanks FB
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Verbs are NOT predictable!
Verbs are NOT predictable! What about all the weird endings for different tenses??? Nouns, much easier.
If it was a choice between a mock Tudor house with a garden in Milton Keynes or a flat in a high rise, even a posh one, I'd choose Milton Keynes. I guess it's whether you want to feel gritty and modern or squat on the ground with muddy fingers listening to blackbirds singing :0) I've never been to Milton Keynes, but I remember a radio program about its designer - it was intended to be people friendly. Not to reflect what was going on at the time but to be the best of the past as people perceived it after the war, and also of the present, with plumbing and schools and hospitals etc. And in so doing create a template for the future. But it was too land expensive and people had to travel to get to the big employers. Not very efficient, just as rearranging words to make a poem musical isn't efficient. But there's room for both?
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I wish I could with these
I wish I could with these words tickle
the muse today, but words are fickle -
sometimes they're both ends and means
but now I've lost them in Milton Keynes
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Fascinating piece and thread.
Fascinating piece and thread. Forced rhyme / inverted structures are what put a lot of people off, I think. They get in the way of the telling. Having said that, many grew up reading that stuff. Classic English verse collections and the like.
Depends what a reader is looking for, I suppose. Aesthetic musicality, lyricism.
Parson Thru
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