Writing Feedback

Hey, I kinda just found this site on a google search, I just wrote this, I have no idea what it is or anything, it just might be the first peice of writing that I carry to completion, but I'm not sure. The line between writing and poetry is pretty thin here, I think, not too sure, its 2:30 in the morning here, and I'm looking for feedback, thanks a bunch :)

*Its the first peice on this page, if you would like to look around the rest of the site, its all original material, you can leave comments in the guestbook as well, thank you*

http://www.freewebs.com/thesiteyouwonttellyourfriendsabout/thingstothink...

p.s. Some of the stuff on there, I come off as an asshole, I apologize for that, it was my semi imature attempt to make the site more racy/appealing...gotta play to your crowd ;)