Hare Stops

Cherry

By catherine poarch

Thu, 17 Mar 2016
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The hare stops there,

in the corn-field stubble.

 

Exclamation ears and eyes

lift to the black and starless skies.

 

Deep in the darkness,

forged in antiquity,

blown to infinity,

something had glimmered,

shimmered and shone.

 

With a change of shape

and a kick of its feet,

the hare is gone.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

a little jewel of a poem - lovely!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I really liked your brevity, and the picture you captured – 'Exclamation ears and eyes' and 'With a change of shape and a kick of its feet, the hare is gone' especially.
I was puzzled a bit about blown to infinity – is that another reference to the sudden flit away of the hare? btw there is a typo in the teaser – it still says 'teh cornfield stubble'.

Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Wonderful images in this lovely poem, Catherine. I could be wrong, but although I love the rhyme factor,   I wasn't sure about the seeming tautology of 'glimmered, shimmered and shone'. Others may not agree - see what you think, though. 

 

Bee

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Thanks so much for the lovely comments and thanks for the cherries. Sorry I didn't reply before but I'm not getting email notifications. Not sure what to do about that. You might not get this!! I may be alone in the Universe?

I'm not quite sure what tautology means, sorry! But I do think it flits about a bit with the rhythm. I wasn't 100% about it. However, I wrote it for my mum's 80th - today - as she loves hares. My sister's illustrated it. I've not given it to her yet though.

The blown to infinity - think that's  whatever was in the sky - like a shooting star.

Have a lovely weekend.smiley