Snap-Shot
By mark_yelland-brown
Wed, 18 Jun 2008
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Eyes clenched in joy, she's in heaven,
he's shell-shocked, death would be kinder,
triumph and catastrophe,
did the world stop in wonder at such extremes of emotion,
no, she'd just won `The Weakest Link`.
I'm driving home and the news on the radio dumps despair
audibly into my lap.
I'm on the move, home,
and people are being smashed to pieces, torn apart literally or in grief.
Football's on tonight,
fish-fingers and chips.
The kids are locked onto telly and hardly grunt a greeting.
You're cooking,
distractedly you kiss me.
Touch, communication, love,
a kiss.
I wish I could concentrate more.
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A great snapshot. Like this
A great snapshot.
Like this line particularly:
'I'm driving home and the news on the radio dumps despair,
audibly into my lap.'
Such a clever image...
(But the comma is unnecessary).
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I like the way you've
I like the way you've captured something seemingly ordinary and turned it into something more so, as exemplified by the third stanza, particularly.
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