30 of my comments have received 33 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017
a few clean up notes
get rid of a couple "littles"
clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"
seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...Read full comment
Posted in Wrinkles
so skillfully realized
Posted on Thu, 17 Jun 2021
I admire/envy the meticulous rendering of your imagination. The care you take in construction and grammar makes this story that much more spellbinding and engaging. Bravo, Penny..Bravoe. And Hipswell is downright Dickensian.Read full comment
Posted in "Willow's Tail" 11
Posted on Thu, 07 Jan 2021
A leader does what nobody else is doing...that's why they're leaders.
Once again I could go on and on with dates and quotes and stats to defend my point of view but what's the point? I've never hated Trump and still don't. As a...Read full comment
Posted in Loser, Loser, Loser
Traumas scalded to retinas indeed
Posted on Sat, 01 Aug 2020
It's not enough to close our eyes and pretend trauma didn't happen. Even with our eyes closed, our heart has a vision of its own that persists like Camembert melting on an abandoned shore that never retreats into the waves of non-chalance.Read full comment
Posted in To my imaginary child