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Otto and the Dude Reel 2

So me and Ice sat there like twin particles ready to collide at the edge of a black hole. Something was about about to happen but nobody knew exactly...

Otto and the Dude Reel One

This is the first reel of a film that's playing in my imaginative recall with two reels to follow.

Asping Cleopatra

Since vocabulary is destiny, let me change the fate of everyone who reads this by introducing a word that I rediscovered recently. I love...

Food for Thought

Who knew about the BFF relationship between baboons and impalas? When I think of a baboon, I think of a screeching, red butted pain in the ass...

Crosswords

Way back in another lifetime, when I was teaching kids how to write, my class used to do the New York Times crossword puzzle together every other...

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8 of my comments have received 9 Great Feedback votes

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simply irresistible

Posted on Thu, 21 Sep 2017

a few clean up notes

get rid of a couple "littles"

clarify this sentence" The look, in her mind’s eye, that right now made her want to her jump right back on one and go home"

seek alternatives to the word "seem" ( appear,...

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Posted in Wrinkles

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The empty seat

Posted on Fri, 17 May 2019

My father filled that seat and left it to me.

Thank you

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Posted in On An Imminent Death

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The problem comes in when I'm

Posted on Sat, 28 Jul 2018

The problem comes in when I'm writing a novella. If the scenes don't attract attention in the beginning, they become far less "compelling" to new readers as the work continues. As of now, only 11 peple at the most, are up to date on what I'm...

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Posted in Short Cherry Rant

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kayfabe

Posted on Sat, 10 Mar 2018

Kayfabe is a carnival term for never letting a non- carny in on the secrets of the carny. Wrestling has a long association with carnivals.

Bad guys are always bad guys in kayfabe and they hate good guys in kayfabe which is like pretending...

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Posted in Donald Trump in the beginning

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i'm beginning to agree

Posted on Mon, 18 Dec 2017

in some ways i've resisted this mine because it seems too easy. Ya know the ageless bugaboo of thinking that it can't be any good unless it's a creative struggle. I should be old enough at this stage to realize this and appreciate the gold mine...

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Posted in Ralph and Big Dave

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I like it

Posted on Thu, 31 Aug 2017

I think I could use some indentations.

My favorite line....."In a way, it’s sort of like I’m feeling the story, connected with the characters beyond sight. Truly in touch with it, if you want.”

want might be will

Good work...

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Posted in Eyes

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very promising

Posted on Sun, 21 Feb 2016

I will continue to read which is the height of compliment, isn't it?

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Posted in Mistress and Servant Part 1

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paragraphing is important

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

yes it is and your paragraphing style moves the reader briskly through the content. Maybe reconsider the commas in the last sentence. I love it when stories end with a very short parageraph. Bravo

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Posted in Play, You...Play Me