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Angel

By celticman on Thu, 17 Jan 2019

‘I’ll get us some coke,’ shouted Kimmie above the disco beat. ‘Nah, I’m alright, I’ve got a can there.’ Angel dinked the red tin on the table with...

Drama

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miracle waters

By celticman on Wed, 16 Jan 2019

Mrs Wylde sipped at her lukewarm tea, half smiling, as she listened to her friend on the phone. The china cup rattled on the gold-rimmed and...

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grab a granny

By celticman on Sun, 13 Jan 2019

Chris walked slowly towards Dalmuir along the canal path, watching the light fade on the water, an open can of Pale Ale half in and out of his coat...

Romance

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ravensbruck 5

By celticman on Thu, 20 Dec 2018

The prisoners filed into the bunker. Dorothea Binz waited for the paperwork and watched the guards, the dogs panting at their side, pulling the...

Historical Fiction

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1376 of my comments have received 1410 Great Feedback votes

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we're all dreamers jenny, but

Posted on Wed, 07 Jul 2021

we're all dreamers jenny, but not all poets.

Posted in Daydreamer

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I'd say in Google's defence

Posted on Sat, 03 Jul 2021

I'd say in Google's defence it doesn't know me either. And I'm not sure if witers' retreat should have a possessive (Champions League doesn't.) I'd be suprised that even in such a fictional place any reader didn't recognise the uniqueness and...

Posted in You

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not sure if fact or fiction

Posted on Wed, 30 Jun 2021

not sure if fact or fiction (which is a good way of marking a quality story). Mums are always number 1. Always.

Posted in Mum

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He starts laughin. We aw dae.

Posted on Tue, 22 Jun 2021

He starts laughin. We aw dae. Sometimes there’s nothin else fur it.

Posted in The Domino Effect

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I'd cut the last paragraph.

Posted on Thu, 24 Jun 2021

I'd cut the last paragraph. Forewarning of what is coming should be in subtext. Too much of a large gulp here.

Posted in Disenchantment 26

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black humour, the kind that

Posted on Tue, 22 Jun 2021

black humour, the kind that buries you. I like it.

Posted in The Domino Effect

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alter's head. is that a play

Posted on Fri, 18 Jun 2021

alter's head. is that a play on words or do you mean altar? Both works, but in different ways. Enjoyed.

Posted in A Feast of Bells

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Yes, we are all in flux.

Posted on Tue, 15 Jun 2021

Yes, we are all in flux.

Posted in Cherry Tree

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super-intendent [no hyphen,

Posted on Sat, 12 Jun 2021

super-intendent [no hyphen, superintendent. And it would be better if you told the reader what he was superintending in your first twenty years. I know you were a teacher. But most readers don't.

I had to look up Kalliope, music box with...

Posted in Fire in the Lighthouse

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a loud whiisper is an

Posted on Fri, 04 Jun 2021

a loud whiisper is an oxymoron. But I know what you mean. Choose whiisper or loud. Not both.

moonlight doesn't trickle.

great start, plenty of foot-to-the-floor action. And the question of what they needed to steal and why remains...