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The most helpful advice I got
Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018
The most helpful advice I got, though I couldn't understand it at the time, is to realise you have choices. It's only so bad if you feel trapped.
The sleep thing is interesting to me. It seems accepted that insomnia is a result of...
It seemed somehow menacing from the first sentence. I like the wonderful sound details of the familiar, "dragged it gently along the terrace" "cool little bubbles popping" "the bottle making a small guzzling sound" "wings beating out a faint...
I like the idea of a better self being like a lost toy.
I don't know if you meant it to, but I find this a hopeful poem, reminds me of cutting off the mouldy bits of plants and suddenly they look so much better and you notice there were...
this is beautiful! All the sh and th and oo sounds, made me think of softness but then the sh sound becomes the noise of a weapon "shaft’s full shining power" and it ends not soft at all with "bombarding light"
Thankyou so much Insert. I wasn't sure. Thankyou for the cherries, too
Have been thinking about crisps for ages since hearing the packets will be here in 1000 years but couldn't think how to do it till read the poetry monthly idea. It is...
My partner believes dogs to be spirit guides. Duko seems to be guiding the narrator to a more peaceful place, helping him to accept a horrible truth rather than put life on hold while hoping for the impossible. I like that the two people who have...
This is beautiful! So fluid, the way the song pulses and the heart pumps to keep the wings moving quickly. Also, couldn't think how you make it clear that the last line is about coming back to earth, and wonder if it is the D's, which have a...
The most helpful advice I got
Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018
The most helpful advice I got, though I couldn't understand it at the time, is to realise you have choices. It's only so bad if you feel trapped.
The sleep thing is interesting to me. It seems accepted that insomnia is a result of...
Read full commentPosted in The Iceberg
It seemed somehow menacing
Posted on Thu, 28 Jun 2018
It seemed somehow menacing from the first sentence. I like the wonderful sound details of the familiar, "dragged it gently along the terrace" "cool little bubbles popping" "the bottle making a small guzzling sound" "wings beating out a faint...
Read full commentPosted in The End of the Evening
I like the idea of a better
Posted on Fri, 29 Jun 2018
I like the idea of a better self being like a lost toy.
I don't know if you meant it to, but I find this a hopeful poem, reminds me of cutting off the mouldy bits of plants and suddenly they look so much better and you notice there were...
Read full commentPosted in No Better Past (IP)
this is beautiful! All the sh
Posted on Mon, 25 Jun 2018
this is beautiful! All the sh and th and oo sounds, made me think of softness but then the sh sound becomes the noise of a weapon "shaft’s full shining power" and it ends not soft at all with "bombarding light"
And it was so satisfying to...
Read full commentPosted in Brightness without burning
Thankyou so much Insert. I
Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018
Thankyou so much Insert. I wasn't sure. Thankyou for the cherries, too
Have been thinking about crisps for ages since hearing the packets will be here in 1000 years but couldn't think how to do it till read the poetry monthly idea. It is...
Read full commentPosted in In your shoes
My partner believes dogs to
Posted on Wed, 06 Jun 2018
My partner believes dogs to be spirit guides. Duko seems to be guiding the narrator to a more peaceful place, helping him to accept a horrible truth rather than put life on hold while hoping for the impossible. I like that the two people who have...
Read full commentPosted in Duka's Return
I love the sense of movement
Posted on Fri, 08 Jun 2018
I love the sense of movement you have achieved with the rhymes and matching vowels:
"dazzling their speedy swooping/sweeping in and scooping"
And the quickness of "dart, smart, dirt, martin"
And I like the human bit in the...
Read full commentPosted in Treasured Mud Oasis
your poem has a beautiful
Posted on Sat, 02 Jun 2018
your poem has a beautiful meaning, too.
Read full commentPosted in Number Spellings!
This is beautiful! So fluid,
Posted on Wed, 30 May 2018
This is beautiful! So fluid, the way the song pulses and the heart pumps to keep the wings moving quickly. Also, couldn't think how you make it clear that the last line is about coming back to earth, and wonder if it is the D's, which have a...
Read full commentPosted in May Sky Melody
yes, I liked that the cows
Posted on Wed, 23 May 2018
yes, I liked that the cows and children died had significance for different reasons, so much heartache put so simply
and that "Winters smelled of kerosene". I remember there were lots of powercuts growing up, so paraffin reminds me of cold...
Read full commentPosted in Histories of a small town in Ontario
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