42 of my comments have received 42 Great Feedback votes
Very good as it is
Posted on Sun, 02 Jun 2019
Very engaging ... in a quite disturbing way. I like the way you concentrate all the tensions in a disintegrating marriage into some of the mundane details, like the quick exit from the shop and the consumption of coffee and snacks. I think a lot...Read full comment
Posted in Pan Out
Posted on Mon, 21 Jan 2019
I think it takes some time - maybe a little too long - for the tension to build, but once the creature emerges it's effective, and the twist at the end works nicely.
You need to be more consistent in your quotes: it changes between one and...Read full comment
Posted in When a Cold Wind Whistles
Posted on Sun, 02 Dec 2018
Funny, warm hearted, and I like the way you focus on a detail of modern history to convey the relationships within your family.
It could do with a proof read: there are some typos and you need to decide whether or not you are spelling out...Read full comment
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