37 of my comments have received 36 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Mon, 21 Jan 2019
I think it takes some time - maybe a little too long - for the tension to build, but once the creature emerges it's effective, and the twist at the end works nicely.
You need to be more consistent in your quotes: it changes between one and...Read full comment
Posted in When a Cold Wind Whistles
Posted on Sun, 02 Dec 2018
Funny, warm hearted, and I like the way you focus on a detail of modern history to convey the relationships within your family.
It could do with a proof read: there are some typos and you need to decide whether or not you are spelling out...Read full comment
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Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018
I liked the gentle, suggestive quality of this, paintine some vivid pictures of the places and hinting at a connection through the sound of the piano. I couldn't help seeing it as the opening scenes of a European art house movie. Is it the...Read full comment
Posted in Melancholic pigeons from Berlin.
Posted on Sun, 28 Oct 2018
Considering it's an extract this works very well as a standalone piece. A credible slice of the type of angst that affects many people at some stage in their life, but with a nice uplifting conclusion. Good one Harry.Read full comment
Posted in Gift: A Son's Story (short extract 3)
Very sad ...
Posted on Sun, 29 Jul 2018
... but powerful in its honesty. I'm sure a lot of people go through these emotions when a loved one who has been seriously ill for a long time passes away. And I like the way you convey that in a lot of little details about the narrator's life...Read full comment
Posted in Those Moments
Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018
This might come across as a bit too quick and a bit too brutal, but I'm sure it represents the way some people treat their children. It pulls together a lot about parental favouritism, impatience and a heartless competition between siblings that...Read full comment
Posted in Choose One Cake Only