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I have 36 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 23844 times and 47 of my stories have been cherry picked.
35 of my 324 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 34 votes

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Mark Say

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Elephant Dung

Love turns sour as two people stare at a painting that uses more than paint. (Inspired by Chris Ofili)
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Lucas (part 2/2)

A ventriloquist's dummy hits hard times
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Lucas (part 1/2)

A ventriloquist's dummy hits hard times
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The Straw Man (part 2/2)

A young boy is distressed by what his father does to a scarecrow
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The Straw Man (part 1/2)

A young boy is distressed by what his father does to a scarecrow

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35 of my comments have received 34 Great Feedback votes

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Oooowww!

Posted on Sun, 01 Feb 2015

Painful, but so real. Captures the way that peer pressure contributes to emotional cruelty among children, and I like the way that you convey Clare's sense of shame without actually stating it. Well done Hayley.

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Posted in Growing Up

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I like this ...

Posted on Sat, 10 Jan 2015

... despite the concluding tragedy. There's a constant emphasis on the mundane but with a suggestion that it can bring just as much joy to a person's life as enduring discomforts in pursuit of over-indulgence. It might be a conservative message,...

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Posted in Lucky For Me

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Effectively vivid

Posted on Thu, 02 Oct 2014

I think this portrays a dramatic little scene in very vivid terms, and made me want to know more about the characters. It was a little frustrating in coming across as just a fragment of something larger, but id does convey the tension within the...

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Posted in The Distance Between Them

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Excellent

Posted on Thu, 04 Sep 2014

Conveys so many old yearnings and frustrations in one brief incident. Well done Torscot.

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Posted in My little Indian in Summer (I.P.)

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Funny, and horribly true

Posted on Sat, 21 Jun 2014

Short, sharp and lethal. Well done Scorpio.

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Posted in Let us pray for the clever people

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Well done SG

Posted on Thu, 20 Mar 2014

Very good. I really like the way you conveyed all the disappointments and little triumphs in a career with such economy. The short sentences work very well in the context and those scraps of detail do a great job of conveying the changes of...

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Posted in The End of the Pier

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Well done John. I found this

Posted on Sat, 22 Feb 2014

Well done John. I found this a very vivid in evoking the mood as much as describing the place, and really impressed by that hint of something sour dropped in at the end. If anything, I thought you could have made a touch more of that, but still...

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Posted in That Field

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Nice story. I like the way it

Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014

Nice story. I like the way it builds the sense of anticipation which is then quickly deflated. I bet most of us have gone through something similar at some time.

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Posted in Dormity Gardens

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Aaaah! Apostrophes with a

Posted on Sat, 30 Nov 2013

Aaaah! Apostrophes with a plural S! You also want to watch out for the its' when it should be it's.

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Posted in Sehnsuct

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