42 of my comments have received 42 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Sat, 22 Aug 2015
Agree with A on this: pace and structure are perfect and it does a great job at conveying the anxiety attached to cold judgements passed by others. We all know this is a world full of grey areas and nuance, but often we're judged on black and...Read full comment
Posted in Result (Inspiration Point)
Sad and charming
Posted on Sat, 30 May 2015
Lovely poem Silver. I like the way you convey the sense that we might try to concentrate our memories in objects that can then be discarded, but that we can never really do so. Short, bitter sweet and quite moving.
One little point: I...Read full comment
Posted in Moving On
I like this ...
Posted on Sat, 10 Jan 2015
... despite the concluding tragedy. There's a constant emphasis on the mundane but with a suggestion that it can bring just as much joy to a person's life as enduring discomforts in pursuit of over-indulgence. It might be a conservative message,...Read full comment
Posted in Lucky For Me
Posted on Thu, 02 Oct 2014
I think this portrays a dramatic little scene in very vivid terms, and made me want to know more about the characters. It was a little frustrating in coming across as just a fragment of something larger, but id does convey the tension within the...Read full comment
Posted in The Distance Between Them