Scorpio88

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I have 123 stories published in 2 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 63875 times and 99 of my stories have been cherry picked.
30 of my 383 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 31 votes

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Cynical Safari

Watch out for them buzzards... (Image free from Pixabay.com)
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Oh Paul

Ahem...before for anybody says anything, this is tongue in cheek. Every morning, before I do anything else, I give myself 10 minutes (no more) to write a really loose sonnet about whatever comes into my head. My only rule is it has to rhyme. Nothing else matters - I don't even have to agree with what I'm writing. Technically, as sonnets they're pretty damned dire - but that doesn't matter either. By the time I'm done the mind has warmed up.
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The Easter Men

If only they could speak. What tales would they tell? What songs would they sing?
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Cherry

The Devil's Surgeon Part 9

We are back in 1494. As preparations begin to combat the plague, it seems some people do not like the idea of a foreign apothecary taking charge of their fate. Meanwhile, the Priest's dislike of the Apothecary is deepened as the church becomes a hospital.

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30 of my comments have received 31 Great Feedback votes

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Wonderful read. Insanely jealous of your ability.

Posted on Wed, 06 Jun 2018

This was an absolutely wonderful read. From the opening lines I had total confidence that the writing would not let me down, that it would stay crisp and sharp and the coherence would be maintained. It is as if you have found the secret of...

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Posted in Duka's Return

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I do like this...though I

Posted on Tue, 24 Jun 2014

I do like this...though I guessed early on where it was going to lead me, it didn't detract from the poem. The technical language of the imagery is nicely at odds with the actual subject. This creates a tension that brings the poem alive.
I...

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Posted in THE PUNCH BAG

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...but studiously avoided any

Posted on Sun, 24 Jun 2018

...but studiously avoided any mention of the Frog Chorussmiley

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Posted in Oh Paul

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This resonated (second time I

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

This resonated (second time I've used that word today and it's only 9.30)

When I got hit by the depression juggernaut I didn't even know I was standing in the road. Apparently everyone else knew something was wrong but because I was busy...

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Posted in The Iceberg

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M'Lud,

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

M'Lud,

The plagues and rashes remain.

Who said anything about commenting? I'm after the lazy blighters who dont read other peoples efforts. If none of us read the work of others then what would be the point...

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Posted in Slackers

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Consider your embarrassing

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

Case dismissed.

Consider your embarrassing rash removeddevil

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Posted in Slackers

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The plot works, the pace is

Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018

The plot works, the pace is good, and there's an interesting twist at the end.

However, for me the narrator and her boyfriend feel stereotyped and because of that the overall story lacks a little bit of bite - even though the ending is...

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Posted in BAIT

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Totally original, extremely

Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018

Totally original, extremely wicked and hilariously sharp. Really well written and I couldn't help smiling when I got to the end.

Possibly a bit wordy in the second paragraph, e.g. A sigh escaped his slightly parted lips...why not just say...

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Posted in The Love Addict

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For those who remember when

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

For those who remember when Ian St John (later of Saint and Greavesy fame) played for Liverpool, I remember seeing a great banner that read:

JESUS SAVES...BUT ST JOHN KNOCKS THEM IN ON THE REBOUND. 

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Posted in Vamos España

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Cracking story. Well thought

Posted on Sun, 17 Jun 2018

Cracking story. Well thought out, well paced and well structured.

I think if you read it aloud you might find a couple of clumsy sentences and a spell and grammar check might get pick some typos. For example: 

'Finally, my feet...

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Posted in End of the World

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