Scorpio88

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I have 111 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 114072 times and 124 of my stories have been cherry picked.
36 of my 440 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 37 votes

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Cherry

Ukulele Lesson 3

In which the Tiger Mother Ukulele and I agree to differ and I add another name to my list of annoying relatives.

The Art Critic

An art critic struggles to tell an artist her painting is not a good as she thinks...
Cherry

Ukulele Lesson 2

WARNING! There is one instance of adult language in this piece (due to my lack of tolerance with artificial intelligence) . Did I say even the longest journey begins with the smallest step? I was wrong. The second step can be even smaller. My unrelenting Tiger Mother ukulele bends my fingers back until I squeal and insists on perfection.
Gold cherry

Ukulele Lesson 1

The longest journey must begin with a single step. Me and my new ukulele friend have a long way to go. We have a relationship to build, a trust to develop, unknown experiences to go through together, and I'm sure some disagreements. But if we can learn from each other, what better journey is there to embark upon. This is that first, tiny step...

Why Should They

Half rant, half the result of shear frustration. What on earth are we doing to ourselves...
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36 of my comments have received 37 Great Feedback votes

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This resonated (second time I

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

This resonated (second time I've used that word today and it's only 9.30)

When I got hit by the depression juggernaut I didn't even know I was standing in the road. Apparently everyone else knew something was wrong but because I was busy...

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Posted in The Iceberg

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M'Lud,

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

M'Lud,

The plagues and rashes remain.

Who said anything about commenting? I'm after the lazy blighters who dont read other peoples efforts. If none of us read the work of others then what would be the point...

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Posted in Slackers

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Consider your embarrassing

Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018

Case dismissed.

Consider your embarrassing rash removeddevil

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Posted in Slackers

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The plot works, the pace is

Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018

The plot works, the pace is good, and there's an interesting twist at the end.

However, for me the narrator and her boyfriend feel stereotyped and because of that the overall story lacks a little bit of bite - even though the ending is...

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Posted in BAIT

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Totally original, extremely

Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018

Totally original, extremely wicked and hilariously sharp. Really well written and I couldn't help smiling when I got to the end.

Possibly a bit wordy in the second paragraph, e.g. A sigh escaped his slightly parted lips...why not just say...

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Posted in The Love Addict

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For those who remember when

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

For those who remember when Ian St John (later of Saint and Greavesy fame) played for Liverpool, I remember seeing a great banner that read:

JESUS SAVES...BUT ST JOHN KNOCKS THEM IN ON THE REBOUND. 

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Posted in Vamos España

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Cracking story. Well thought

Posted on Sun, 17 Jun 2018

Cracking story. Well thought out, well paced and well structured.

I think if you read it aloud you might find a couple of clumsy sentences and a spell and grammar check might get pick some typos. For example: 

'Finally, my feet...

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Posted in End of the World

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An observant story Drew. I

Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018

An observant story Drew. I got the impression the narrator was not happy being made to comply with the needs of his siblings. Good on him I say for making a stand. But now he has to make a choice between getting out of that situation and living...

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Posted in Choose One Cake Only

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Hi TK. It's a good story with

Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018

Hi TK. It's a good story with a believable narrator but I did find it a little confusing trying to work out what was going on. Maybe you should try and shorten it and make it simpler. Did you need all the stuff about the insurance man for example...

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Posted in Grace Part Twenty.

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Very invocative of my visits

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

Very invocative of my visits and time in Spain. Cold beer and pizza, Vamos Espana indeed - except Sergio Ramos. I'm a Liverpool supporter and he does not amuse me.

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Posted in Vamos España

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