Scorpio88

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I have 101 stories published in 2 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 84678 times and 116 of my stories have been cherry picked.
33 of my 434 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 34 votes

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King

"...any man's death diminishes me, because I am involved in mankind. And therefore never send to know for whom the bell tolls; it tolls for thee." Well, so wrote John Donne. Maybe he was right in his day. Maybe not so much in 2019.
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Cherry

To Mary (a train of thought on a dark night...)

Dark nights, writing by the light from my desk lamp, fuelled by a glass of Laphroaig. I could not be in a better place. If any of you are unlucky enough not to have read Mary Oliver's Wild Geese (to which in many ways this poem is a sort of homage), you are truly missing out on one of the 20th century's greatest poems.
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Kelp

Just trying to look at things in a different way...
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Promise

A poet makes one last request...
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Pick of the Month

the essence of quintessence

Are we really becoming so damned shallow?

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33 of my comments have received 34 Great Feedback votes

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Totally original, extremely

Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018

Totally original, extremely wicked and hilariously sharp. Really well written and I couldn't help smiling when I got to the end.

Possibly a bit wordy in the second paragraph, e.g. A sigh escaped his slightly parted lips...why not just say...

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Posted in The Love Addict

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For those who remember when

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

For those who remember when Ian St John (later of Saint and Greavesy fame) played for Liverpool, I remember seeing a great banner that read:

JESUS SAVES...BUT ST JOHN KNOCKS THEM IN ON THE REBOUND. 

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Posted in Vamos España

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Cracking story. Well thought

Posted on Sun, 17 Jun 2018

Cracking story. Well thought out, well paced and well structured.

I think if you read it aloud you might find a couple of clumsy sentences and a spell and grammar check might get pick some typos. For example: 

'Finally, my feet...

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Posted in End of the World

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An observant story Drew. I

Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018

An observant story Drew. I got the impression the narrator was not happy being made to comply with the needs of his siblings. Good on him I say for making a stand. But now he has to make a choice between getting out of that situation and living...

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Posted in Choose One Cake Only

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Hi TK. It's a good story with

Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018

Hi TK. It's a good story with a believable narrator but I did find it a little confusing trying to work out what was going on. Maybe you should try and shorten it and make it simpler. Did you need all the stuff about the insurance man for example...

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Posted in Grace Part Twenty.

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Very invocative of my visits

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

Very invocative of my visits and time in Spain. Cold beer and pizza, Vamos Espana indeed - except Sergio Ramos. I'm a Liverpool supporter and he does not amuse me.

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Posted in Vamos España

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I agree with the sentiment.

Posted on Fri, 15 Jun 2018

I agree with the sentiment. Very much akin to one of my favourite poems (Orkney / This Life by Andrew Greig).

I do like it but I'm not sure about the structure. The prose is really good but there's something about the line length...

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Posted in The minutes and the hours

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Thankyou. You  have

Posted on Sun, 14 Jan 2018

Thankyou. You  have recognised my humble brilliance. You are obviously a person with immense insight and good taste. ...

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Posted in Coffee and Cake at the Writers Club

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Posted on Sun, 14 Jan 2018

 

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Posted in Coffee and Cake at the Writers Club

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Agree wholeheartedly with the

Posted on Sat, 01 Jul 2017

Agree wholeheartedly with the sentiment.

Any chance of a tune to go with it?

 

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Posted in Just coping (Song)

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