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Cherries must be on ration if
Posted on Fri, 13 Jan 2017
Cherries must be on ration if this wasn't given any.
Every picture perfectly painted like a modern day Pathe newsreel.
And not first person to boot.
I have no cherries but I award you a sherbert flying saucer.Read full comment
Posted in Breaking the ice
Yet why live only for the day
Posted on Mon, 08 Feb 2016
Yet why live only for the day,
shackled to this moment, when
each of us can claim a history
worthy of perhaps a celebration.
While our tomorrow's await patiently
with their golden treasures as yet hidden,
Posted in Path Untaken
The thing is Jesus (I can
Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014
The thing is Jesus (I can call you Jesus can't I?) This is actually rather good. But it makes for shit reading. If this was a book I'd have binned it before line 2. But the dialogue is definitely film material. It's quite pacey - like being...Read full comment
Posted in Johnny Incest: P.I. (Part 2 of 2)
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
Lovely natural flow of language in an autobiographical / reminiscent poem. I think the last two lines make the poem. Too soon for what the reader asks. Too soon for the loss of childhood? Too soon for the loss of friendship? What would the...Read full comment
Posted in Castles in the Sand