wolfsbane. (poem)

I drink her in and then I spit to spout her out... entirely.
I thrust long, deep, with a sigh of plumped rich precision;
But I pace my bleeding aching urges to a gentle glow.
Oh... to sup this real bitter blistered free communion,
And to touch with revelry, her sweat ridden body slow.
For she beckons me from the pitch of this twilight night,
I know she’s waiting... yet I dare not dare I, choose to go.
Because. I know the cost of loss and total empty dislocation;
I feel it shudder through my soul to the point of screaming no!
And I hear insane rhyming chords echo the lunacy now within.
So I try not to let them guide my new found hidden instincts.
And as the sublime moonlight drive within me starts to flow;
I reach out with claw-ridden hands, its talons beyond myself…
I twist I turn I turn I tryst I twist I turn I tryst and turn;
To finally throw myself upon this, my new found purpose;
And then lay to rest the beast that lies within... completely.

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Comments

maisie | July 14, 2011 - 22:39

i love the style change, and the first line really rocks!

alphadog1 | July 15, 2011 - 07:43

Thanks Maisie It's a first draft so I'll be shaping it later.

alphadog1 | July 15, 2011 - 16:00

i have made some changes... subtle grammar ones, and the removal of repitition... is it better? I feel its completed.

alphadog1 | July 20, 2011 - 13:19

I have made some changes.. is it crap now?