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Our love is nature

Posted by andrew-evans on December 14, 2010 - 20:17

With arms open
I let you in
like a ray of sun,
and in return
you do the same,
letting me crash
into you, like the sea.
Your love
is a breath
of fresh air in my head,
clearing my mind,
filling it
with an aroma,
sweet,
like lavender.
Your voice is bird song
your eyes, the sky,
and now having found this love
I know without it
I'd die.

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Beeme | December 14, 2010 - 20:22

Another very sweet and emotive love poem with great imagery! I think that 'you're' should be 'your' in the second half of the poem as it would make more sense.
As you're is short for 'you are'. Don't worry I always get confused between the two :)

Beeme xx

andrew-evans | December 14, 2010 - 20:24

Thanks for the heads up on spelling Beeme. Yeah I enjoyed writing this and literally got the idea less than 10 mins ago from the title of a song

insertponceyfre... | December 15, 2010 - 07:31

I like this one too. There's another you're/your typo in the first half:

You're love
is a breath

andrew-evans | December 15, 2010 - 08:44

Really not doing well with the you're/your issue this week am I lol. Glad you all like this poem though.