Learn to love me

“You shouldn't need to learn
to love me, that's the part
that should come naturally"

You couldn't have spoken truer words, dear B.
A bitter-sweet poem that tugs at one's heart.

Luigi xx

Thankyou so much Luigi xx

Luigi has said it all, and you, of course, Beeme - so very poignantly.

Tina x

Thankyou Tina. Your words made me smile xx

I agree with Luigi, so bittersweet but so wonderful! You remind us all that we're human, Beeme and your poetry is just coming on in leaps and bounds!

Magic xxx

Aww thankyou so much Magic, I miss seeing you around here, hope your ok. I hope one day I am as good as you :-) xxxx

I miss being around here Beeme believe me! I'm just so busy at the moment with my university application - and the poetry, unfortunately, aint coming like it used to! But I've just written something new which I'm posting tomorrow, get myself back in the game! And don't worry, I'm sure you have great things ahead of you where poetry is concerned! ;)

Magic xxx

new Beeme
excellent doesn't come easy
after all years things all change
true! words for better or worse
But youv'e put it in a nut shell.
julie xx.

Thankyou Julie xx

"However long it takes me"
What is wrong with loving
me now?

so so so true, Beeme! love it x

Thankyou SugarHorse, I'm so glad you enjoyed. xx

I agree with Luigi, very nice Beeme xx

Thankyou Artisus, glad you enjoyed. xx

do you mean lose in the last stanza as opposed to loose?

Juliet

Yes I do, thankyou for spotting that,

Beeme xx

seen you changed the typo, but I missed the word next to it, should be 'their' as in the words lose their meaning. Another thing to work on is avoiding cliches, think of an original (personal to you) way to say how the words felt (rather than shot through the heart). A fresh image here will automatically effect the bullet cliche as well. I can really feel the emotion in this but the images could be even sharper. Juliet

Thankyou juliet, I have changed the other typo and tried some new words,

Beeme xx

that first stanza has so much more power. Glad I helped.

Juliet

Hey...Beeme (and Juliet;-) this is miles better now (just a tiny typo...second stanza - should be 'always'.)

You really have worked miracles on this, Beeme.
Well done. As I always say, even the best can be bettered;-)

Tina xx

Thankyou Juliet. Tina, I am so glad you have recognized an improvement on this, I've changed the typo. My thanks to you for reading through this again :-)

Beeme xx

new Beeme
Many congratulations
on the cherry! re-done great.
just re-read it excellent'!
julie xx

Well done on the cherry Beeme!

Magic xxx

Thankyou Julie and Magic! :)

Beeme xx

I think I'm going to kill this guy he's better off dead.

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Apologies please. But really you keep on hammering about this please try to be a bit more positive write about your shiny new red bicycle or something man this is getting boring please- well I guess one doesn't have to read it, goodnight! &&

Thankyou for the apology Nolan.

Beeme